Une histoire courte

for Fictions du Vendredi which is graciously hosted by Rochelle.

 

I thought I’d try to confuse some of you this week by writing a piece partly in Google-assisted Français, sorry, French.

 

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Fear not though folks, because I’ve recorded the audio completely in plain English!

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I heard a voice

Suivez-moi, s’il vous plaît it said

From the darkness

 a girl appeared

A look of fear

a tear-stained face

Ce qui vous veulent? I asked

Suivez-moi et vous verrez she replied

je ne veux pas I said 

Vous devez she begged

She ran down an alley

Hâte she called

je ne peux pas suivre ton rythme I yelled

Faster and faster she went

Rapidement she shouted

 Je suis perdant vous I said

She disappeared

Là où êtes vous? I called

Pas grave she cried 

Ce qui vous a voulu? I asked

Il est trop tard she sobbed

Guess I’ll never know

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48 thoughts on “Une histoire courte

  1. Suzette Benjamin's avatar Suzette Benjamin March 15, 2023 / 16:40

    I wonder…why wa it too late..perhaps we’ll never know…ah well..c’est la vie!
    Good one Keith! Super creative!!

  2. Sadje's avatar Sadje March 15, 2023 / 16:48

    I am throughly confused 🫤

      • Sadje's avatar Sadje March 15, 2023 / 16:51

        Hopefully.

      • Sadje's avatar Sadje March 15, 2023 / 16:53

        Now I do. You’ve ended it at a suspenseful moment

  3. Iain Kelly's avatar Iain Kelly March 15, 2023 / 17:31

    Mysterious. Given she’s upset and it’s too late, I’m guessing it’s not a good thing. Still, on with his holiday!

  4. msjadeli's avatar msjadeli March 15, 2023 / 17:59

    Like Iain’s, this one also reads like a dream. The challenge is to figure out what it’s trying to tell you.

    I like the effort you put into your story presentations, Keith.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings March 16, 2023 / 14:05

      Thanks, Lisa, that’s exactly how I hoped it would come across. For me, presentation is the thing I enjoy most when posting, though it can sometimes take a long time to achieve the desired effect!

      • msjadeli's avatar msjadeli March 16, 2023 / 19:38

        You’re welcome, always a pleasure.

  5. Liz Young's avatar Liz Young March 15, 2023 / 18:40

    Pourquoi la Franglais, mon ami? Tres amusent, mais je ne comprends pas la motif de la femme.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings March 16, 2023 / 14:25

      Je ne sais pas pourquoi, mais c’était amusant à écrire ! Beaucoup de choses étranges se sont produites quand je vivais en France.

  6. beth's avatar beth March 15, 2023 / 19:55

    🇫🇷

  7. neilmacdon's avatar neilmacdon March 15, 2023 / 20:29

    Vive l’entent cordiale

  8. Tannille's avatar Tannille March 16, 2023 / 05:01

    Now I wish I knew more than English and Tannille gibberish. 😀

      • Tannille's avatar Tannille March 17, 2023 / 04:19

        Ooo nice, I’ll have to remember that one!

  9. The Sicilian Storyteller's avatar The Sicilian Storyteller March 16, 2023 / 11:31

    Oh, quanto sei ingiusto a lasciarci in tale incertezza! Spero che la seconda parte non sia lontana. Vedi cosa succede quando ci prendi in giro? Hahaha!!

  10. rochellewisoff's avatar rochellewisoff March 16, 2023 / 12:10

    Dear Keith,

    Thank you for the much needed translations. Now we’ll never know either. 😉

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  11. Sandra's avatar Sandra March 16, 2023 / 13:06

    A very haunting little tale. Well done.

  12. athling2001's avatar athling2001 March 16, 2023 / 13:14

    Well done! I’m okay with never knowing.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings March 17, 2023 / 11:56

      Thanks so much, Tracey. Por experiencia personal, ¡sí pueden!

  13. plaridel's avatar plaridel March 16, 2023 / 18:34

    darn, creative writing at its best. well done. 🙂

  14. Bill's avatar Bill March 16, 2023 / 19:45

    Excellent, Keith. Is your French really that good? I don’t see Dale’s comment (yet). I wonder which language she will choose? 🙂

    Thanks for the audio. It not only helped with my abysmal language disability, your talent added to the suspense. May they meet again soon.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings March 17, 2023 / 12:04

      No Bill, despite living there for a few years it isn’t! Thanks for listening along, I’m delighted to have suspended you!

      • Bill's avatar Bill March 17, 2023 / 16:31

        🙂

  15. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta March 17, 2023 / 12:35

    Great Bill, I read it first to test my French and was so pleased I understood it, it’s been some years since I have used it but I suppose it is still there lurking in my brain somewhere thanks 🙂

  16. Nobbinmaug's avatar Nobbinmaug March 18, 2023 / 01:39

    Mysterious, even in English. That’s the kind of encounter that will torment one’s imagination for a lifetime.

  17. granonine's avatar granonine March 18, 2023 / 17:49

    I sure am glad you translate the French into English for the audio!

    I see you commented that you had a little fun with this one. But–don’t you always?

  18. CGraith's avatar CGraith March 18, 2023 / 20:15

    Way to keep us hanging!

  19. GHLearner's avatar GHLearner March 19, 2023 / 12:54

    Oh what fun, my rusty French was creaking along nicely. The idea and presentation are unique. Merveilleux.

  20. britcanwrites's avatar britcanwrites March 21, 2023 / 04:14

    Oh, no. I hope everything turned out okay for her.

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