Written in a rush…

for Friday Fictioneers




Alarm clock rings

Hop out of bed

Leap in the shower

Drag on some clothes


Coffee too hot

Scald my mouth

Burn the toast

Trip over the cat


Rush out the door

Run down the road

Leap on the train

Then off again.


Fly to the office

Sit at the desk

Stare at the screen

Answer the phone


Nip out for lunch

Gobble a snack

Back to work

Start over again


Home-time at lastย 

Stand on the train

Pushed and jostled

Then off again


Open the door

Grab the mail

Pour a drink

Collapse on the couch




train-station-sandra-crookThank you, Rochelle, for hosting and Sandra Crook for sharing your photo with us.

Fan the frog to join in the fun!


63 thoughts on “Written in a rush…

  1. rochellewisoff Jul 24, 2019 / 11:57

    Dear Keith,

    What a frenetic and fun piece of writing. And, as always, I’m amazed at what you’re able to do with the frog. So much fun. I might have to steal this one from you for future use. ๐Ÿ˜‰



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    • Keith's Ramblings Jul 24, 2019 / 15:16

      Thanks so much, Rochelle. I love mucking around with the frog. He’s all yours if you promise to give him a good home!


  2. Colline Jul 24, 2019 / 12:10

    I could feel the rush to get things done, and the continual movement in our lives. Nicely written.

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  3. Sandra Jul 24, 2019 / 13:22

    Very original, from the pace, the layout to the sweating frog. Well done.


  4. hilarymb Jul 24, 2019 / 17:36

    Phew indeed … and smelly if it’s been a hot day! Great writing though – cheers Hilary

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jul 25, 2019 / 09:03

      Not much fun. I did a daily rush hour commute from Eastbourne for years so I remember it well.


      • hilarymb Jul 25, 2019 / 09:35

        Hi Keith – that’s why I never wanted to commute … did so in places by car … the Lewes to E/b one was the worst … but at least I was in my own space and could get to where I wanted to get to once back here … the thought of commuting by train always appalled me … I’ll do it occasionally now as when my mother was ill in London – horrific … but needs must. Seems to be hotter today – less breeze … cheers for now – Hilary

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      • Keith's Ramblings Jul 25, 2019 / 12:51

        I went to London – got a seat on the way there and invariably stood most of the way back! I hope the new aircon is working at the Congress Theatre tonight as I’m going to be there!

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      • hilarymb Jul 28, 2019 / 14:19

        Hopefully they’ll have opened the doors and refreshed the place through … though I hope the seats are fixed … let us know .. via a story! Enjoy –

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  5. michael Jul 24, 2019 / 20:23

    I thank heavens that I am retired, you reminded me that it is to hot ride the trains.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jul 25, 2019 / 08:59

      Sometimes I miss working in London when that was pretty well my daily experience. Life by the seaside is very different! Cheers Mimi.


  6. granonine Jul 25, 2019 / 00:20

    Keith, I love the way you set this up–especially that last stanza. Perfect ๐Ÿ™‚

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  7. Dale Jul 25, 2019 / 05:01

    And so it goes… that damn wheel just keeps us going ’round and ’round!
    Excellent pace. Had me out of breath
    And, honestly, you are having way too much fun with fonts and frogs!

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jul 25, 2019 / 08:54

      That’s life for many folk, but thankfully not me any more! Love fonts, love Froggie so the fun will continue! Cheers Dale.

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      • Dale Jul 25, 2019 / 13:41

        Yes, you lucky you!
        You do have a knack for the Froggie thing!

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  8. Fandango Jul 25, 2019 / 07:03

    Ah yes. Been there, done that and you captured it perfectly. But now Iโ€™m retired, so no more of that for me. Yay!

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  9. draliman Jul 25, 2019 / 07:33

    Ooh, my weekday routine! I like the slanty words at the end ๐Ÿ™‚ Lots of fun!

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  10. Fatima Fakier Jul 25, 2019 / 12:18

    When commuting was my life, I enjoyed it. The rush and the jostle. And I feel that your story captured that experience completely. Although honestly, I’m glad commuting is not a daily thing for me. Very original post.


    • Keith's Ramblings Jul 25, 2019 / 15:55

      I have mixed emotions – sometimes I miss it and other times I wonder how I put up with it! Thanks Fatima


  11. Dawn M. Miller Jul 25, 2019 / 19:13

    Wore me out just reading it, lol.
    Very descriptive and fits the prompt nicely.
    Love your falling letters, too.

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  12. bearmkwa Jul 25, 2019 / 19:58

    I got winded just reading that. Loved it! Love your falling poetry and the creative use of word position, too. The downward flow was perfect!

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  13. pennygadd51 Jul 25, 2019 / 21:00

    Phew! Now I need a large gin! Nice, witty take on the prompt, Keith.


  14. James McEwan Jul 26, 2019 / 20:06

    A frantic description of the clockwork life of a daily commute – hell weekends I expect are just as hectic, shopping, gardening and all that jazz. fun read.

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      • msjadeli Jul 28, 2019 / 17:16

        I liked the pace of the story and all the tidbits that make up a day. Good going on winning the race each day, Keith ๐Ÿ™‚

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  15. Margaret Jul 28, 2019 / 08:35

    What a pace! On and on it goes until you collapse at the weekend. No way to live. Well captured.

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  16. patriciaruthsusan Jul 29, 2019 / 14:20

    Well done, Keith. I could feel the stress building and then easing. I absolutely love the frog, poor little guy. ๐Ÿ˜€ — Suzanne

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