Forty four words

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where the given word is Opposite and the limit, just 44 words.

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At this point I would normally have included an audio, but I’ve got a bit of a cold and I’d hate to pass it on to you so I’m afraid you’ll have to do withou.…taaa-chooo!

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Two lonely souls in a fishbowl,

Swimming the opposite way.

Passing twice a day.

 

Nights he worked, she slept.

Days she worked, he slept.

 

Day after night after day.

 

One lonely soul in a fishbowl.

Swimming round and round.

 

Day after night after day.

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Btw, ‘we’re just two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl, year after year’ is a line from Pink Floyd’s song Wish You Were Here.

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25 thoughts on “Forty four words

  1. Suzette Benjamin's avatar Suzette Benjamin October 22, 2022 / 12:50

    Lol…so kind of you to not pass on your cold…via audio transmission .. 🤣🤣
    Keith, your story described quite a few people I knew in real life when I was growing up. They were working hard to make ends meet, so that their families could have a better quality of life. Thank you for the reminder that work is not all sunshine, rainbows and ease. 👍

    Oh and… bless you! I thought I heard you sneeze 🤕

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings October 22, 2022 / 13:33

      Thanks for your comment Suzette, I also know of some who got their priorities wrong. But I can’t thank you for blessing me because apparently, if I do, a fairy will die!

      • Suzette Benjamin's avatar Suzette Benjamin October 22, 2022 / 14:51

        Oh, my we cannot have that! Long live fairies!!

    • Sadje's avatar Sadje October 22, 2022 / 16:32

      😂😂😂

      • Sadje's avatar Sadje October 22, 2022 / 18:00

        😄😂

      • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings October 23, 2022 / 13:38

        That’s what my eyes are doing with this ****** cold!

      • Sadje's avatar Sadje October 23, 2022 / 14:20

        😉

  2. hilarymb's avatar hilarymb October 22, 2022 / 17:07

    Great fun Keith – but I’m glad you enlightened me … I needed that! Cheers Hilary

  3. poetisatinta's avatar poetisatinta October 22, 2022 / 17:44

    This is a beautiful poem Keith, hope you are better soon and long life to fairies 🙂

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings October 23, 2022 / 13:46

      Thank you, the fairies are looking after me well!

  4. dorahak's avatar dorahak October 22, 2022 / 20:22

    Heard that sneeze!! Get well soon. 🙂
    People miss more than they know when they give up today with each other for a tomorrow that may never come. Sad tale, well told, Keith.

  5. ben Alexander's avatar ben Alexander October 22, 2022 / 20:33

    This is so well done, Keith – and I hope you feel better ASAP!

    <3
    David

  6. Ron.'s avatar Ron. October 22, 2022 / 21:46

    The “Like” button doesn’t do it. There should be a “LOVE IT!” button. BLAMMO!

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings October 23, 2022 / 14:01

      Wow, what can I say? I rarely attempt poetry and always wonder what the reaction will be when I do. I wasn’t expecting a comment such as this!

  7. Patricia's avatar Patricia October 23, 2022 / 23:52

    Love it. Well done!

  8. Bill's avatar Bill October 24, 2022 / 17:00

    Thank you for considering my health, Keith. And a fine poem on top of that. I hope you recover soon. 🙂

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