Forty four words

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where the given word is Opposite and the limit, just 44 words.


At this point I would normally have included an audio, but I’ve got a bit of a cold and I’d hate to pass it on to you so I’m afraid you’ll have to do withou.…taaa-chooo!


Two lonely souls in a fishbowl,

Swimming the opposite way.

Passing twice a day.


Nights he worked, she slept.

Days she worked, he slept.


Day after night after day.


One lonely soul in a fishbowl.

Swimming round and round.


Day after night after day.



Btw, ‘we’re just two lost souls swimming in a fish bowl, year after year’ is a line from Pink Floyd’s song Wish You Were Here.


25 thoughts on “Forty four words

  1. Suzette Benjamin Oct 22, 2022 / 12:50

    Lol…so kind of you to not pass on your cold…via audio transmission .. 🤣🤣
    Keith, your story described quite a few people I knew in real life when I was growing up. They were working hard to make ends meet, so that their families could have a better quality of life. Thank you for the reminder that work is not all sunshine, rainbows and ease. 👍

    Oh and… bless you! I thought I heard you sneeze 🤕

    Liked by 1 person

  2. hilarymb Oct 22, 2022 / 17:07

    Great fun Keith – but I’m glad you enlightened me … I needed that! Cheers Hilary

    Liked by 1 person

  3. poetisatinta Oct 22, 2022 / 17:44

    This is a beautiful poem Keith, hope you are better soon and long life to fairies 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

  4. dorahak Oct 22, 2022 / 20:22

    Heard that sneeze!! Get well soon. 🙂
    People miss more than they know when they give up today with each other for a tomorrow that may never come. Sad tale, well told, Keith.


  5. Ron. Oct 22, 2022 / 21:46

    The “Like” button doesn’t do it. There should be a “LOVE IT!” button. BLAMMO!

    Liked by 1 person

    • Keith's Ramblings Oct 23, 2022 / 14:01

      Wow, what can I say? I rarely attempt poetry and always wonder what the reaction will be when I do. I wasn’t expecting a comment such as this!


  6. Bill Oct 24, 2022 / 17:00

    Thank you for considering my health, Keith. And a fine poem on top of that. I hope you recover soon. 🙂


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