for Friday Fictioneers on a Wednesday!
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“Just look. Isn’t it beautiful? It reminds me of the time I visited Victoria Falls. The thrill of rushing water, tumbling down then scurrying away carrying with it anything that dared to get into its path.
It sparkled, it twinkled, it splashed, it roared.
I sat and let my mind wander, it took me to places, special places. The longer I sat the more soothed I felt. The aroma assaulted my senses, just as it does now.
As I left, I felt like a new person, contented….”
“What are you going on about, all you did was flush the toilet!
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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and to David Stewart for the picture.
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Excellent twist Keith
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Glad you like it Sadje, thank you!
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You’re most welcome
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What a marvelous journey you took me one…and then flushed it! Lol. 🤣
Great storytelling! Bravo
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It was good while it lasted! Cheers Suzette.
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Yes! Exactly 🤣
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LOL Yes, but did you put the seat down Keith? 😆
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Absolutely not, I get cross when ladies don’t put mine back up to where it should be!
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I have a sign I made in my bathroom “If you put it up, put it down. If you put it down, put it back up!”
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That’s great, I want one!
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…The longer I sat the more soothed I felt. The aroma assaulted my senses, just as it does now. …oops what a ride you took us on, Keith!
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I’m pleased to hear that Neel! Thanks so much.
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A brutal come down for a magical reverie
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That about sums it up!
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Ha, you never disappoint Keith. I suppose if you close your eyes, splash a bit of tap water on your face, and flush, you might just recreate the ambience!
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I may just try that Iain, and let you know how it goes!
Btw, I had a lovely evening at the Glasgow Royal Concert Hall on Saturday!
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I might just try that Iain and let you know how it goes!
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🙂
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Well, there’s one thing about it: a trip to the bathroom’s a lot cheaper than to the Falls. Glad he’s finding pleasure in the little things of life. 🙂
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Very true Christine! There’s pleasure in most things if you know where to look!
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Good description completed by a lovely twist, Keith. Clever work writing the parallels between Victoria Falls and a flush of the loo without giving away the twist.
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I’m glad it came off, thanks, Penny!
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Oh this is great Keith!
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Thanks so much, Di!
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Love your sense of humour
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Ha Ha grand finale😜
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Absolutely!
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Heeheehee! As Grandma (my mother, my children’s grandmother) likes to say when she is done in the restroom, “I feel better all over more than anyplace else!”
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Haha, that’s brilliant!
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Sometimes a visit makes me feel the same way! Funny twist
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The escape room! Thanks so much.
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Funny business Keith.
Tracey
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Thanks, Tracy!
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Hi Keith – put me off my visits to Victoria Falls now … ?! Well done – good change up … Hilary
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Oh no! Don’t be put off, it’s one most spectacular things I’ve ever seen!
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Oh it won’t … I’ve been a few times … and my grandfather designed the bridge – so family connections ‘for ever’ … cheers H
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Really, that’s amazing!
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I like the surprise ending.
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I’m pleased, thanks, Frank!
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Oh dear, what an ending.
Love it.
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All good things come to an end!
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Indeed they do,
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oh what a relief it must have been. fun story. 🙂
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It usually is, plaridel!
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Well, that made me go back and reconsider what kind of aroma there was! Awesome twist.
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Not the most pleasant! Thanks, Patricia.
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So, the aroma assaulted your senses? Well, passing on Vitoria Falls then. (I knew it was coming. I just didn’t know what.) Funny twist, Keith. 🙂
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So, I almost caught you out! Cheers, Bill.
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Yes, Sir.
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Reality is such a bore.
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That’s why I prefer dramas to documentaries!
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Too good, I would LOL…but texting just isn’t the real me 🙂
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For me, it’s a necessary evil!
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Most people feel the same 🙂
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Gosh, Keith, you left us laughing our heads off. “
The aroma assaulted my senses…””
(Unfortunately in this case it was another kind !!!)
I’m going to use that phrase with your permission. 😄😄
Have a heady weekend 🌻
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I’m so pleased you had a laugh, Natasha! Feel free to use whatever you want, in fact, I’d feel honoured!
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The honour is mine dear Keith.
Good wishes for a brand new week!
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Oh, good grief! I’m laughing in spite of my UTTER disappointment at such a mundane ending 🙂
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I am SO sorry Linda, at least you had a chuckle!
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Can’t add anything, laughing too much. And it completely took me by surprise.
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Thanks so much for your lovely comment!
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You always get me with those twists love it!
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Just as I hope! Thanks so much.
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Oh my goodness, that’s hilarious! I chuckled at the last line. Thanks for the laugh, Keith, and hope you have a wonderful weekend. 🙂
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A nicer response I couldn’t wish for! Thanks, Brenda.
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Bahahahaha hilarious Keith. You gave me a great laugh with that last line!
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Mission accomplished! Thanks, Laurie.
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Mmmm. I like how the sense of peace comes across and the idea of appreciating the enormous power of waterfalls. The humour at the end simply wipes away the tranquility. (I trust you used paper and not wet wipes).
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Paper of the finest quality of course! Cheers James.
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One has to have a strategy to fill up the time at such moments. Yours sounds wonderful – quite a diversion. It’s a shame you had to come thudding back to reality at the end. Great story – funny twist.
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They do say all good things come to an end! Thanks so much, Margaret.
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Keith, what a perfect illustration of how the creative mind works. You made me cackle which made Mlady and Dotty look at me.
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I bet they did! Cheers, Lisa.
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You’ve got to love a guy who takes pleasure from the simplest of things. 🙂
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So true Sandra!
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Dear Keith,
For some, it’s the simple pleasures in life. Your last line made me smile.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks so much, Rochelle.
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It is the journey worth remembering. Lovely twist in the end.
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Indeed, thanks Vartika.
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Oh how hilarious! I wasn’t expecting that outcome!
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I’m delighted to have taken you by surprise!
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Glad you pointed me in the right direction to find you. Enjoyed your journey sparked by the swell/swirl of your waterfall.
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Thanks so much, Oneta.
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Loved this – I think stories with a twist at the end are my favorites, lol
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Thank you. Me too Jennifer!
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