for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt.
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It had gone according to plan.
They found his abandoned car on a bridge. The Police assumed he’d jumped. His body would have been swept downstream. Finding it was not going to be easy.
Somewhere overseas his new life had begun. A new identity, a new home. However, he was unaware he’d been followed by those he’d defrauded. His complacency was shortlived.
They found his abandoned car on a bridge. La Polizia assumed he’d jumped. His body would have been swept downstream. Finding it was not going to be easy.
It had not gone according to plan after all.
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Keith's Ramblings 
Ooh! This is so well written Keith.
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Thsanks for your kind words, Sadje.
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You’re most welcome 🤗
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Great writing. I was swept away.
Tracey
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Thanks, Tracey, not too far away I hope!
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Far enough but I’ll be back. Tracey
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Nice top and tail
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I like that, thank you, Neil!
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The underworld plays for keeps, he found out the hard way. Excellent story.
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Absolutely, thanks, Mimi.
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Meaning his murder and he got away again or his original plan of building a new life and now he’s dead instead?
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Definately the latter. Good ideas are not always the best ones.
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Woot! Woot! I love how you repeat the lines. It works really well.
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I’m pleased – and relieved! Thanks so much, Lisa.
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You are welcome. Flash fiction at its best.
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Ooops! I guess he neglected to think about one very important factor- but they did not forget about him. Excellent!
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Exactly! Thanks so much, Violet.
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Wonderful writing, Keith. The use of repetition works so well here.
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Thanks, Dale, it saves time too!
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True ’nuff… but you did have to think about it first…
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Nice work, Keith. The turning of the tables…
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Indeed they did! Thanks, Will.
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the twist
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…unfortunately for him!
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darn, it didn’t end up with a happy ending.
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Why am I smiling? This is a serious story Kieth, and shows where there is an element of doubt then the plan is open to failure.
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Someone else was smiling too, but it wasn’t him. Thanks so much, James.
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Dear Keith,
It seems this guy isn’t a great planner. Love the repetition.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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He thought he was, but he couldn’t have been more wrong. Thanks, Rochelle.
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Brilliant storytelling!
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Thank you so much, Brenda.
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This is brilliant, dear Keith, and devious, too! I love that little twisteroo with the repeating line and sneaking in la polizia! Nicely done; your character could easily be my Nigel. Bravo!
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So much for his new life in bella Italia. Unfortunately, his plan ended up on the rocks!
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Haha! Very good!
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Great take on the prompt! Maybe he should rather have sold a kidney to pay his debts? 😉
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A good point, Christine!
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Beautifully crafted and a very engaging tale, Keith. Loved it.
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Thanks for your kind words, Dahlia.
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A perfect loop, so well done.
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I enjoyed this and the doubling up on the idea of having the car left to be found – but he was not smart enough to evade the ones he cheated – very good
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