for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers photo prompt.
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It had gone according to plan.
They found his abandoned car on a bridge. The Police assumed he’d jumped. His body would have been swept downstream. Finding it was not going to be easy.
Somewhere overseas his new life had begun. A new identity, a new home. However, he was unaware he’d been followed by those he’d defrauded. His complacency was shortlived.
They found his abandoned car on a bridge. La Polizia assumed he’d jumped. His body would have been swept downstream. Finding it was not going to be easy.
It had not gone according to plan after all.
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Ooh! This is so well written Keith.
Thsanks for your kind words, Sadje.
You’re most welcome 🤗
Great writing. I was swept away.
Tracey
Thanks, Tracey, not too far away I hope!
Far enough but I’ll be back. Tracey
Nice top and tail
I like that, thank you, Neil!
The underworld plays for keeps, he found out the hard way. Excellent story.
Absolutely, thanks, Mimi.
Meaning his murder and he got away again or his original plan of building a new life and now he’s dead instead?
Definately the latter. Good ideas are not always the best ones.
Woot! Woot! I love how you repeat the lines. It works really well.
I’m pleased – and relieved! Thanks so much, Lisa.
You are welcome. Flash fiction at its best.
Ooops! I guess he neglected to think about one very important factor- but they did not forget about him. Excellent!
Exactly! Thanks so much, Violet.
Wonderful writing, Keith. The use of repetition works so well here.
Thanks, Dale, it saves time too!
True ’nuff… but you did have to think about it first…
Nice work, Keith. The turning of the tables…
Indeed they did! Thanks, Will.
the twist
…unfortunately for him!
darn, it didn’t end up with a happy ending.
Why am I smiling? This is a serious story Kieth, and shows where there is an element of doubt then the plan is open to failure.
Someone else was smiling too, but it wasn’t him. Thanks so much, James.
Dear Keith,
It seems this guy isn’t a great planner. Love the repetition.
Shalom,
Rochelle
He thought he was, but he couldn’t have been more wrong. Thanks, Rochelle.
Brilliant storytelling!
Thank you so much, Brenda.
This is brilliant, dear Keith, and devious, too! I love that little twisteroo with the repeating line and sneaking in la polizia! Nicely done; your character could easily be my Nigel. Bravo!
So much for his new life in bella Italia. Unfortunately, his plan ended up on the rocks!
Haha! Very good!
Great take on the prompt! Maybe he should rather have sold a kidney to pay his debts? 😉
A good point, Christine!
Beautifully crafted and a very engaging tale, Keith. Loved it.
Thanks for your kind words, Dahlia.
A perfect loop, so well done.
I enjoyed this and the doubling up on the idea of having the car left to be found – but he was not smart enough to evade the ones he cheated – very good