For Six Sentence Stories which is hosted by Denise aka GirlieOnTheEdge. This week’s given word is Truck.
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Where am I?
There’s a nurse peering down at me, I’m on a bed, tubes and machines surround me and Annie is crying, why is Annie crying?
The nurse is shaking her head and a doctor’s looking at the clock, ‘time of….’
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‘Hey, mate, you were miles away’ says Paul, nudging me.
‘Sorry’, I say, ‘I was daydreaming, hey look at the time I’m supposed to be meeting Annie’.
I rush into the street, I step off the kerb, I hear the booming horn of an approaching truck then the screeching of tyres…….
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oh!
Very oh!
Life in reverse!
A premonition, although he didn’t know it.
Even if he had, he still would’ve faced the same fate
Poor Annie
Indeed.
Foreboding! Oh my!
About right!
Still mentally applauding your Six, Keith. For the impact (I swear, unintentional pun, lol) so few word are capable of delivering, made all the more potent by your oral recitation of them.
Thanks so much for your kind words, it makes the 10 attempts at the audio worthwhile!
This is worthy of a Twilight Zone award! Excellent and a bit un-nerving; I loved it!
What can I say? That’s really nice of you, Nancy.
Hindsight!
They say it’s a wonderful thing, not sure he’d agree! Thanks, Reena.
Oohhh! 🫣
I couldn’t put it better myself!
Where is there a place more frightening than a hospital bed with an unfolding memory.
very cool, Six
I can think of nowhere. Thank you, kind sir.
Years ago I woke in a hospital bed with white curtains around the bed. I thought I had died and wondered when I would find out where I ended up.
Oh my goodness, I can’t imagine how that must have felt.
Surprisingly, I wasn’t scared. Just curious.
I like how this story wraps around. The beginning follows the end and then we are back at the end again.
Thanks, Frank, I’m pleased it had the desired effect!
Wow. Just, wow.
Thank you so much, Mimi.
Brilliantly written, Keith. The premonition and then the abrupt ending were very effective.
That’s really kind of you Nicole, thank you.
Me gusto mucho el relato te deja asombrado el final Te mando un beso.
Oh my…I thing he should have listened to the warning….nicely done, Keith! 💞