My Sunday Best

A short story, written by my Sunday Muse. 





We were sitting at our favourite table in our favourite coffee bar. A table in a corner, away from the gaze of other coffee aficionados. We sat hand in hand, gazing into each other’s eyes, our all hearts a-flutter! 

Then something happened, something that changed my life in a moment. I heard a voice in my ear. A voice I knew only too well.

 “I’m watching you,” it said.

I was stunned. I spun around but saw nobody I recognised. As I leapt to my feet I knocked over my mug spilling coffee across the table.

“I, erm, have to, erm, leave, sorry”, I stammered.

When I got home an open suitcase lay on the doorstep, my clothes, my laptop, and my nick-nacks strewn all across the path.

I’ve seen neither my wife nor my ‘petite amie’ from that day to this.

I know it sounds crazy, but whenever I did something I shouldn’t, no matter how trivial like having that extra drink or parking my car where I shouldn’t, I heard that voice in my ear. 

“I’m watching you”.

I’m in a new relationship now. I’ve sworn to be faithful and never do anything I shouldn’t! Thank goodness, the voice left me in peace!

I was back in that coffee bar the other day. It was busy and the only free table was that one in the corner. I was minding my own business when an attractive young lady approached me and asked if she could share my table.

 I heard a voice in my ear. A voice I knew only too well.

 “I’m watching you,” it said.


eyes and man 2Thanks to Carrie for hosting.  Image by Sarolta Ban 

32 thoughts on “My Sunday Best

  1. imnobodywhoareyou Dec 11, 2022 / 16:27

    Our conscience has that irritating way of whispering at the most in opportune time.


    • Keith's Ramblings Dec 11, 2022 / 16:46

      I know, and he’s really trying hard!

      Thanks for pointing out I posted the wrong story earlier, I probably wouldn’t have noticed!

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      • Sadje Dec 12, 2022 / 00:33

        My pleasure.


  2. Carrie V. H. Dec 12, 2022 / 01:35

    I love your stories Keith! That little voice in our ear is both a blessing and an annoyance. I love where the image took you!

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  3. Sherry Marr Dec 12, 2022 / 02:52

    Ha. I love that ending!

    Liked by 1 person

  4. Christine Goodnough Dec 12, 2022 / 03:28

    Your Sunday Muse is keeping a good eye on you. You’d best heed her or she might leave you without a thread of thought.

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  5. Natasha Dec 12, 2022 / 05:17

    Brilliant!! Please publish your Bite size fiction book soon now, Keith my friend. :)))

    And I love how committed he tries to be to that voice.
    I guess they makes sure he stays so.

    Love that Xmasy mast-head.
    You have yourself a great week.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Dec 12, 2022 / 16:26

      Thanks, thanks and thanks again, Natasha!

      Many years ago I self-published a little book called The Stranger and Other Short Stories and it did okay. It’s out of print now and I lost the only copy I had!

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  6. Dawn Dec 12, 2022 / 11:02

    Listen to your conscience…it tries to keep you on the straight and narrow path! Well written, Keith! 💞

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  7. Stacy MS Dec 12, 2022 / 20:59

    I think this is wonderful…I wonder when that voice will pop up again?


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