A story …

Apr 11, 2022Keith's Ramblings

… for Sadje’s What Do You See prompt.

Your_heart_is_an_empty_room_by_LeMiss It was their anniversary. He burst through the apartment door clutching a magnificent bouquet.

She was nowhere to be seen.

Everything of hers, gone. The robe door ajar, her garments vanished. Drawers yawned, empty. The dressing table, bare, her bits and pieces of colours and smells, disappeared.

He bent down trying to capture a little of her fragrance and lingered as he breathed it in. For a second he thought he saw her, sitting there on the bed. He wiped a tear from his eye and she was gone.

The flowers dropped to the floor.

His phone vibrated, startling him. He stabbed the screen, his heart pounding in his chest. A text appeared.

‘Sorry’ it said. Just one word, ‘Sorry’.

He pressed Reply and typed a single word back. ‘Why?’

He trembled, phone clutched in his shaking hand. It burst back into life, another text.

‘Sorry’ it said, just one word. ‘Sorry’..

Sadje Apr 11, 2022 / 13:23

You’ve done it again Keith! Such a heartbreaking story in so few words. Thanks for joining in

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- Keith's Ramblings Apr 13, 2022 / 17:41
  
  Nice of you to say so, thanks for hosting, Sadje.
  
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  - Sadje Apr 13, 2022 / 17:44
    
    My pleasure
    
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Christine Goodnough Apr 11, 2022 / 15:37

Well told and poignant, but…awww…poor guy!

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- Keith's Ramblings Apr 13, 2022 / 17:42
  
  I feel sorry for him myself! Thanks, Christine.
  
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messymimi's meanderings Apr 12, 2022 / 01:42

So sad. Knowing why wouldn’t help.

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- Keith's Ramblings Apr 13, 2022 / 17:42
  
  Best leave it and move on. Cheers, Mimi.
  
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Natasha Apr 13, 2022 / 06:38

Your fiction is getting darker than ever before, Keith.

I am amused at the same time awe-inspired.

Good one.

here’s mine:

https://natashamusing.com/2022/04/the-grand-return-fiction-natasha-musing/

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- Keith's Ramblings Apr 13, 2022 / 17:44
  
  Thanks so much. Don’t worry, it won’t last Natasha!
  
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  - Natasha Apr 13, 2022 / 17:52
    
    I’m not worried I’m excited what other intriguing spin your writing will take, dear Keith.😎
    
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emkingston Apr 13, 2022 / 18:45

Gripping on the heartstrings with this one, Keith. Wow. Great take on the prompt.

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- Keith's Ramblings Apr 14, 2022 / 12:45
  
  Thanks for your kind words.
  
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  - emkingston Apr 14, 2022 / 18:58
    
    You are most welcome! I enjoyed it.
    
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Gr8BigFun Apr 14, 2022 / 16:11

A great take. Nothing worse than being totally blindsided and the left to wonder why.

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ben Alexander Apr 18, 2022 / 21:38

This is so sad, Keith 😦 😦 😦 😦

-David

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