Thirty four words

Keith's Ramblings

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where the given word is Cave and the limit just 34 words.

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I’m in a cave. My footsteps echo.

             pitpitpatpatpitpitpatpat…

I sing, ‘lalala’. 

              lalalalalalalala…

I sidle through a gap. It’s dark.

I shout ‘hello’. I hear an echo.

              farewellfarewellfare…

I shiver. I turn. Where’s the gap?

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30 thoughts on “Thirty four words”

  2. Christine Goodnough Jan 15, 2022 / 17:46

    Wow! At least he lived to tell the tale 😉
    All that clanking at the end…was that the sound of the “echo” sharpening a knife? Can’t be. My imagination’s getting carried away.

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  5. Sunra Rainz Jan 15, 2022 / 21:55

    Oooh, creepy! I don’t suppose google maps would work down there, Keith. Rather macabre the way you put the writing prompt box into what looks like a gravestone. Or was it meant to be the mouth of a cave?

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  9. hilarymb Jan 16, 2022 / 08:50

    Hi Keith – should be a/n Halloween post … not as we emerge into the daylight of Spring – glad I don’t remember these ‘horror’ tales! Cheers Hilary

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  12. Bill Jan 16, 2022 / 17:49

    Oh, where indeed?
    Great little story well read and played. Keith, star of blog radio searching for the gap. You are such a clever man.

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