Eighty seven words

Keith's Ramblings

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where the given word is Brush and the limit, 87 words. 

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She was the breadwinner, not him. He loafed around all day doing nothing, unable even to make a sandwich for his lunch. 

Ask him to do something and he’d find a half-baked excuse for not doing it.

Once he tried making toast. It dropped to the floor landing butter-side down. That should have told him something but it didn’t.

One morning she walked away, determined to claim the slice of life that was rightfully hers, doubting he’d bother to brush away the crumbs of their stale relationship.

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21 thoughts on “Eighty seven words”

  3. Denise's avatar Denise Oct 9, 2021 / 13:02

    I just watched a true crime story about a stay-at-home Dad who got his best friend to kill his wife while he was out of town with the kids – visiting her parents, no less. Some guys are not worth the air they breathe. At least the woman in your story is still alive.

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    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings Oct 10, 2021 / 14:29

      Wow, I didn’t imagine doing anything quite that extreme! Cheers, Denise.

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  4. Na'ama Yehuda's avatar Na'ama Yehuda Oct 9, 2021 / 16:38

    Ah, this is perfection. (especially the telling nature of toast falling butter side down …!) 😉

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  6. hilarymb's avatar hilarymb Oct 10, 2021 / 09:59

    Hi Keith – or probably clean the floor … she’ll be fine. Enjoy another beautiful early Autumn day … cheers Hilary

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  7. Bill's avatar Bill Oct 10, 2021 / 11:39

    Oh, Keith, a striking blow for morbid reality. Cleverly told in 87 words. Well done.

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  8. Michael B. Fishman's avatar Michael B. Fishman Oct 10, 2021 / 18:41

    A remarkably unlikeable guy (the character, not you!) who you managed to make me feel sorry for. (And not because I identify with him!)

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