A short story …

for Friday Fictioneers

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“Wake up Gilbert, it’s blowing a gale out there,” said Gertrude as their mobile home shook sending a vase of flowers crashing to the floor. “So much for the lie-in we were looking forward to”.

Gilbert sat up, rubbed his bleary eyes and dragged back the curtain.

“More like a tornado Gert, I’d swear I just saw a tree blow past. There goes another, and a road sign!”

The shack shuddered and swayed.

“I said we should have bought a proper house” grumbled Gertrude.

 

The truck driver’s phone rang.

“You idiot” shouted his boss. “You were supposed to collect mobile thirty-seven, not twenty-seven!”

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71 thoughts on “A short story …”

  1. Sadje's avatar Sadje May 5, 2021 / 14:40

    Oh no!

  2. Denise's avatar Denise May 5, 2021 / 15:38

    Hilarious. Did not see thst coming. Unfortunately the two tornadoes I’ve experienced were not hilarious at all.

    • Denise's avatar Denise May 5, 2021 / 15:38

      That not thst!

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 5, 2021 / 16:43

      I can’t even imagine what it must be like. Thanks for thst Denise!

  3. pennygadd51's avatar pennygadd51 May 5, 2021 / 15:53

    Oooh! What on earth would you do if you woke up in that situation? Terrifying!

  4. Mason Bushell's avatar Mason Bushell May 5, 2021 / 16:28

    Haha! So, funny. Return the couple at once driver! Well done, Keith!

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 5, 2021 / 16:56

      He’ll some apologising to do that’s for sure! Cheers Mason.

      • Mason Bushell's avatar Mason Bushell May 5, 2021 / 18:07

        Yes he definately will. A large repair bill to I bet!

  5. Christine Goodnough's avatar Christine Goodnough May 5, 2021 / 16:35

    Love the ending twist! With several RTM builders in our area, on our little highway we see houses go past frequently — but none of them with occupants. 🙂

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 5, 2021 / 17:23

      It would be funny if you did though, wouldn’t it?! Thanks Christine.

      • Christine Goodnough's avatar Christine Goodnough May 5, 2021 / 21:18

        It would indeed. Especially to see someone peering out the upstairs window of a two-storey RTM.

  6. larry trasciatti's avatar larry trasciatti May 5, 2021 / 17:12

    Next time he’ll listen to Gertrude, I should so hope

  7. Iain Kelly's avatar Iain Kelly May 5, 2021 / 17:18

    Oops, well at least they get an adventure out of it. I suspect the driver may be looking for new employment…

  8. Elizabeth Young's avatar Elizabeth Young May 5, 2021 / 18:10

    Oops! Though how they got the trailer onto a low-loader without shaking the occupants awake is a mystery!

  9. granonine's avatar granonine May 5, 2021 / 18:13

    An unexpected ride, for sure! Has me smiling 🙂

  10. Michael's avatar Michael May 5, 2021 / 19:56

    Tornadoes are nasty, and I expect that the driver is likely to get a nasty shock.

  11. trentpmcd's avatar trentpmcd May 5, 2021 / 20:11

    ooops. I guess it’s better than the hitman going to number 27 instead of 37…

  12. rochellewisoff's avatar rochellewisoff May 5, 2021 / 20:41

    Dear Keith,

    Now that was an unexpected moving experience for them. 😀 Thanks for the laughs.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

  13. jenne49's avatar jenne49 May 5, 2021 / 21:12

    Now that was a laugh out loud one, Keith. Excellent.

  14. Na'ama Yehuda's avatar Na'ama Yehuda May 5, 2021 / 21:32

    Well, Toto, I guess they are not in Kansas anymore … 😉

  15. notestowomen's avatar notestowomen May 5, 2021 / 22:22

    LOL. That driver must be going at a terrific speed for them to think of a gale and a tornado. Funny tale, Keith. Love the frogs.

  16. Dora's avatar Dora May 6, 2021 / 03:00

    Keith,
    LOL. You’re the master of misdirection and had me thinking of tornadoes and whatnot. This was not a good day for the benighted couple, but then again, what if they’ve been relocated free of charge to a Mediterranean beach?! Happy ending!
    ∼🕊Dora

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 6, 2021 / 11:12

      That’s thought, it could turn out very nicely! Thanks for your lovely comment Dora,

  17. Tannille's avatar Tannille May 6, 2021 / 07:45

    Hahaha You just can’t get good help these days.

  18. hilarymb's avatar hilarymb May 6, 2021 / 08:40

    Hi Keith – funny – poor old Gilbert and Gertrude … I wonder what happens next?! A good story to have up one’s sleeve! Cheers, seems less windy, today – Hilary
    PS – carpet gardens are over … and the mix of colours wasn’t brilliant – that little pocket sang out to me … so give it another 3 – 4 weeks I’d suggest … but always there …

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 6, 2021 / 11:31

      I wonder too! I’m sure it’s a story they’ll be relating forevermore!

      Thanks for the info re. the carpet gardens, I’ll give it a month!

  19. James McEwan's avatar James McEwan May 6, 2021 / 08:50

    It is good to know that Gilbert and Gertrude are deep sleepers, although waking up when your house has gone for a tour along the road might spoil breakfast. What about the paper delivery and the post, how could they possible start the day with the Daily Standard to read.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 6, 2021 / 11:36

      I could do without bills arriving, but no paper means no crossword! Nooo!

  20. Sandra's avatar Sandra May 6, 2021 / 09:37

    That’s quite an image you left with this one, Keith.

  21. Brenda's Thoughts's avatar Brenda's Thoughts May 6, 2021 / 18:42

    Oh no, that’s hilarious. They were on the move, not the trees. I really enjoyed this one, Keith!

  22. plaridel's avatar plaridel May 6, 2021 / 18:49

    i don’t know whether to laugh or cry, but mistakes do happen. 🙂

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 7, 2021 / 10:21

      I laughed when I wrote it, so no tears please plaridel!!

  23. GHLearner's avatar GHLearner May 6, 2021 / 22:13

    Heheh, I admit I did see it coming, and laughed all the more for it. Great fun.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 7, 2021 / 10:29

      Just a shame they didn’t! I’m so pleased you enjoyed it, thank you.

  24. draliman's avatar draliman May 7, 2021 / 13:36

    Ha ha, my other story idea was this, but I couldn’t make it work. Nicely done with the “storm” 🙂

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 7, 2021 / 14:16

      Seems the wind was blowing in my direction not yours Ali! Cheers.

  25. Nobbinmaug's avatar Nobbinmaug May 7, 2021 / 14:53

    A rude awakening indeed. That was funny.

  26. D. Avery @shiftnshake's avatar D. Avery @shiftnshake May 7, 2021 / 14:54

    Ha, that’s a good one well done.
    Something like happened to me. My now husband our dogs and I were staying temporarily in a truck camper that was on blocks in a friend’s back yard. It had been sold but not picked up by the new owner yet. I woke thinking there was an earthquake.

    • Keith's Ramblings's avatar Keith's Ramblings May 8, 2021 / 15:13

      Oh my goodness, I should think you did! Quite an experience. Thanks so much.

  27. athling2001's avatar athling2001 May 7, 2021 / 17:43

    Whoops! They are off for an unexpected adventure!

  28. msjadeli's avatar msjadeli May 8, 2021 / 05:32

    I hate it when that happens! Your story gave me a big chuckle, Keith.

  29. itsshellywool's avatar itsshellywool June 16, 2021 / 19:58

    Oh, I loved this!! It’s so funny!

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