One hundred and ninety nine words …

for the Ragdag Daily Prompt where Christine has provided today’s word, Unoccupied.




He climbed stairs to her apartment clutching a bouquet of roses, red roses. In his pocket, a small velvet box. He let himself in. 

‘Hi honey’ he shouted.   

No reply, silence.  But she was expecting him, surely.  He came round every Tuesday evening.

The bedroom door was ajar.  Why? .She always insisted on keeping it closed. . It creaked as he nervously pushed it open. .Something didn’t seem right.

Everything was gone. Robe doors gaping, her garments vanished.  Yawning drawers, empty. Her precious diary was missing from her bedside cabinet. The dressing table lay bare, the pots and bottles of colours and smells gone.  He bent down to breath in a little of her fragrance. For a second he thought he saw her, just there, sitting on the bed. He smiled, wiped away a tear and she was gone. 

His phone rattled and bleeped.  ‘New message’ it said on the screen. Fumbling with the buttons, his heart pounding, he stared at the message.  ‘Sorry’ it said.  Just one word, ‘Sorry’.  He pressed reply and typed a single word back.  ‘Why?’

He stood trembling, the phone clutched in his shaking hand.  It burst back into life.  A new message.  ‘Sorry’ it said, just one word … 

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14 thoughts on “One hundred and ninety nine words …

  1. Prior... Sep 6, 2020 / 17:31

    so sad- but it does happen – and masterfully worded, Keith
    amazing what some authors can do with under 200 words – move us – bring us into a world – up and down and then leave us with the heartache – or gratefulness – hmm

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      • Prior... Sep 8, 2020 / 18:21

        The pleasure was mine – I know you more of a humor writer – from the days I did Friday fictioneers – and that was kind of what I connected to Keith’s Ramblings – and so it was fun to see you flex some other muscle with this angle

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      • Keith's Ramblings Sep 10, 2020 / 13:18

        As they say, a change is as good as rest. Great to see you around again, it’s been a while.

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  2. Sadje Sep 6, 2020 / 17:47

    Aww, so sad. Hope well you’ve written about good feelings and reactions.

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  3. Christine Goodnough Sep 6, 2020 / 23:23

    Oh, this is really heart-wrenching. Sorry doesn’t really say anything, does it?
    Thanks for joining in today’s Ragtag prompt. 🙂

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