A short story…

Jan 15, 2019Jan 15, 2019Keith's Ramblings

for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers

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It used to be our field. Now it’s a building site, new houses apparently. I played there with my parents. Played hide-and-seek, flew a kite. The funfair used to come. Roundabouts, chairoplanes. I won a goldfish once! And the circus came with clowns, acrobats and a lion in a cage. Years later I played footie there with my mates. I had my first kiss there and my first…well, you know!

Then I got in with a bad crowd. We did things we shouldn’t, horrid things. One night we had a fight with the other lot, a terrible fight. Things got out badly out of hand. That night we buried…something, in the rough ground in the corner.

The builders stopped work this morning. They found something, or what’s left of it after all these years. The Police are there, crawling all over the site like a flock of yellow ants.

Grrrr. Why am I telling you this? How stupid. Mention anything to a soul and you’ll regret it. Keep it zipped. OK? You’ve been warned.

Wordcount 175

FFfAW is hosted by Priceless Joy. This week’s photo is by Yinglan.

messymimi's meanderings Jan 15, 2019 / 13:46

Eventually, it all comes out. Excellent story.

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Natasha Jan 15, 2019 / 13:49

Got to learn the craft of deft, tight story telling from you Keith.

Good one, indeed.

Looking forward to have you link up with us on #WordlessWednesday tomorrow. 🙂

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 12:22
  
  Thanks for your kind words. See you there Natasha!
  
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hilarymb Jan 15, 2019 / 15:01

Hi Keith – yes I wonder how many others did similar – though count me out of that thought. Things are found out in the end … at some stage – I’ll keep quiet for you on this one – good read though – cheers Hilary

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 12:21
  
  Your silence is appreciated Hilary!
  
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Christine Goodnough Jan 15, 2019 / 16:01

Well written! I’m quite happy to not know what they found. 😉

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 12:20
  
  Very sensible! Thanks Christine.
  
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Priceless Joy Jan 15, 2019 / 21:23

Sounds like this young man is already caught! He is just spinning his wheels! Great story, Keith!

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 12:19
  
  He certainly is! Thanks PJ
  
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Abhijit Ray Jan 16, 2019 / 05:09

Too many bad things happening. Kids play ground being converted to housing block. Then kids fighting and killing another kid, whose remains found today. Too bad, too sad.

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 12:16
  
  It happens, sadly. Thanks Abhijit
  
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H.R.R. Gorman Jan 16, 2019 / 12:57

Nice! Love how the ‘something’ is still obviously illegal! I’d assume it’s a body, but you can change the story a lot if you assume something magical!

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2019 / 13:44
  
  Precisely what I thought!
  
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Still Loved...Still Missed Jan 16, 2019 / 14:53

Enjoyed how this story was told. Good work.

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 17, 2019 / 10:50
  
  I’m pleased! Thanks so much
  
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pensitivity101 Jan 16, 2019 / 15:11

Another good story Keith.

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 17, 2019 / 11:08
  
  Thanks so much.
  
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Tannille Jan 17, 2019 / 14:53

So very curious. Would make a great start to something larger!

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 18, 2019 / 11:28
  
  I’m tempted! Thanks for dropping by.
  
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Ellespeth Jan 21, 2019 / 07:23

There ya have that, then! Yikes! My lips are sealed.
Ellespeth

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 21, 2019 / 10:17
  
  Thank goodness! Cheers Ellespeth
  
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Mike Jan 21, 2019 / 20:47

Yes. To many parks are disappearing, great descriptive writing.

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- Keith's Ramblings Jan 23, 2019 / 11:44
  
  Too right. The one I played on throughout my childhood is now an industrial estate.
  
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