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May 8, 2018May 8, 2018Keith's Ramblings

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Tick tock, here he comes, tick tock, right on time, tick tock, twelve o’clock, tick tock…..

Ten he said, three four, right-hand side, five six, over there, seven eight… nine….ten….

In he comes, through the door, I hear his steps, first floor, nearly here, second floor, knock knock, knock the door.

Here’s the money, where’s the girl, you said she’d be here… what the hell……!

Time to go, need to run, leave him here, ditch the gun.

Tick tock, I should have guessed, tick tock, blood, my chest, tick tock tick tock.. tick…tock….ti

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Iain Kelly May 8, 2018 / 10:18

Running out of time quite literally. Nicely done Keith.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:53
  
  Indeed he was. Thanks Iain.
  
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Varad May 8, 2018 / 11:20

The events leading upto the finale has been captured perfectly. Gripping narrative, Keith

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:54
  
  Thanks so much, Varad.
  
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Denise May 8, 2018 / 13:22

Well done. And I waited, too.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:54
  
  Thanks for doing so Denise!
  
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Priceless Joy May 8, 2018 / 15:24

My gosh, I love how you wrote this with time ticking away. Great story!

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:55
  
  I’m pleased my odd format worked for you PJ!
  
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hilarymb May 8, 2018 / 15:39

Hi Keith – brilliant and I thought you were going to be doing a shout out for the Tick Tock anthology … but I’ll be thinking of other things today – clever – cheers Hilary

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:56
  
  I didn’t have time!!! Thanks, Hilary.
  
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messymimi's meanderings May 8, 2018 / 23:04

When you play with fire, tick tock, at some time you will get burned. Well done!

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:57
  
  Very true. Cheers mimi.
  
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Michael May 9, 2018 / 00:48

Time can be deadly Keith. Good response to the image.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 07:57
  
  It certainly was in this case. Thanks Michael.
  
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anuragbakhshi May 9, 2018 / 09:31

Creepy, spooky stuff Keith.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 9, 2018 / 10:02
  
  Delighted to have spooked you! Cheers, Anurag.
  
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Donna B. McNicol [@dbmcnicol] May 10, 2018 / 23:25

Brrr….shiver….chills

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2018 / 23:31
  
  That about sums it up! Cheers Donna.
  
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yarnspinnerr May 11, 2018 / 07:30

Love the way you crafted this. Great read.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 11, 2018 / 10:24
  
  Not my normal style, I’m pleased it seems to have worked! Thanks so much YS
  
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Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist May 13, 2018 / 05:01

Great technique to use the tick tock to build the tension.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 13, 2018 / 11:15
  
  I’m pleased it worked! Thanks. Irene.
  
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athling2001 May 14, 2018 / 19:49

Another great story. Excellent tension throughout.

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