Flash Fiction

Post 1625. Tuesday January 30

 

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A pinch of his fingers and the flame went out, the heady scent of lilies that moments earlier filled the room repressed by the reek of smokey tallow.

He sat back and sighed.

*

Days, weeks, months he’d waited. A vigil beside her bed. Did she know he was there? Could she sense the sadness he felt?

There she lay in a tangle of wires and tubes like a discarded puppet. No. It wasn’t fair, not on her, not on him. It was pointless. ‘Why?’ he wondered.

‘Why not?’ he thought. So he did.

Then he stood and felt his way across the darkened room, into the hallway and out into the street. The glistening sun assaulted his weary eyes and a blanket of warmth embraced him; welcomed him to a new beginning.

What became of him nobody knows. He just left, never to be seen again.

 

Word count 149

photo-20180129154606147Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers is hosted by Priceless Joy and this week’s photo prompt is by Goroyboy.

22 thoughts on “Flash Fiction

  1. anuragbakhshi Jan 30, 2018 / 11:22

    An intense story from you for a change Keith. I liked it. Just to be clear, he snuffed out his wife’s life, who was on life-support?

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  2. Iain Kelly Jan 30, 2018 / 11:40

    It is tempting to think we could just get up and disappear, off to lead another life, but. as with this character, to do so is to leave our responsibilities to others behind. Good moral quandary this one.

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  3. yarnspinnerr Jan 30, 2018 / 13:04

    I interpret it as an after death experience. Great write.

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  4. James Jan 30, 2018 / 15:49

    A horrible dilemma. At what point do you say “good-bye” and start over?

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  5. Woman walking Max Jan 30, 2018 / 17:06

    I was riveted by this story, really effective succinctness. Guess we all have wondered what it would be like to be in the man’s situation …

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  6. Priceless Joy Jan 30, 2018 / 21:41

    Poor guy! His sadness consumed him to go into the light and disappear. Great story Keith!

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 31, 2018 / 09:31

      I can’t imagine what it’s like and I hope I never go through it. Thanks mimi..

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  7. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist Jan 30, 2018 / 22:21

    You captured the waiting perfectly and the metaphor of the candle being snuffed out as he snuffs out his wifes suffering, ending the inevitable and the waiting. I wonder what his new beginning will be. It is not that easy to start over although perhaps he’d grieved during the waiting and it was time to move on. Great story.

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  8. Tina Sequeira Feb 4, 2018 / 10:58

    Incredibly written as always! One of my personal faves of your stories…Keep writing! Cheers 🙂

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  9. Meena Feb 4, 2018 / 13:01

    Keith, this was an intense story from you. I had to read twice to understand. I hope it is not illegal and he does not face consequences for his actions. Or did he kill himself too?

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