245 words

Keith's Ramblings

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‘Look’ said Mike pointing between the carousel and the roller coaster.

‘If you think you’re getting me in there you’ve…no…stop!’

‘Come on Molly’,  he yelled dragging her towards the ghost train.

She escaped from his grasp and made a bee-line for the the burger van.

‘Cowardy custard!’ he yelled, ‘I’m in Car 22 – see you if I make it through!’ 

He clambered aboard. With a jerk and a groan it disappeared into the darkness.

Armed with a double special with cheese and extra sauce she wandered back to the ghost train looking forward to seeing his frightened face and throbbing veins when he emerged. She waited a few minutes, but there was no sign of him. In fact, there were no cars exiting at all.

An anxious looking ghost staggered from the tunnel.

‘What’s happened Mister Ghost?’ Molly asked.

‘Something terrible Miss’, he replied.

‘So where’s my boyfriend?’ 

Suddenly Car 22 lurched from the tunnel. It was empty. 

‘What have you done with him?’ Molly cried.

A tap on her shoulder made her jump. She spun round, dropped her burger and saw Mike standing there.

He got the biggest fright of the afternoon when he saw her ashen face and the tomato sauce dribbling from her gaping mouth!

‘Mike, I thought…I thought..I thought you were…’

‘No, Molly’, he chuckled when he’d recovered. ‘It broke down and I walked out! Fancy a ride in a teacup, or are you afraid we’ll drown?’

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Thanks to Jenne Gray and C.E.Ayr for hosting The Unicorn Challenge

© Ayr/Gray

26 thoughts on “245 words”

  2. Denise Hammond's avatar Denise Hammond Feb 22, 2025 / 14:17

    Good one!

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  3. Melody Jacobs's avatar Melody Jacobs Feb 22, 2025 / 14:47

    What a fun and suspenseful scene! I love the playful banter between Mike and Molly—it really captures the thrill of a day at the amusement park. The twist with the ghost and the empty car adds an exciting layer to the story! It’s great how you’ve built up the tension, only for it to turn into laughter at the end. Thanks for sharing this delightful snippet! I’d love for you to check out my new post as well!

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  4. Sally's avatar Sally Feb 22, 2025 / 14:53

    Well done! I especially like how each scared the other!

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  9. ceayr's avatar ceayr Feb 23, 2025 / 10:56

    I think Molly should stick to singing in the band!

    Fun stuff, Keef!

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  11. jenne49's avatar jenne49 Feb 23, 2025 / 16:05

    Jings, Keith, I’m exhausted, running with all the drama and misdirection… Excellent stuff.
    Extremely satisfying that Mike got a fright too.

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  12. Sadje's avatar Sadje Feb 24, 2025 / 11:10

    Haha! How he turned the tables on her. Excellent story

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