A shortened story …

…for Sadje’s What Do You See? prompt.

My first draft was boringly long, so here is an abridged version (pun intended!)





rose-clipart-transparent-background-21Look, someone’s left some roses. She loved roses.

She was never one to drink much, so when she left the bar late that night I thought perhaps I should follow her to make sure she was safe. But instead, I stood and watched as she walked towards the bridge. 

I somehow knew what she was about to do and I felt this was one decision she should make for herself. I didn’t try to stop her. After all, her life had been one spell of misery after another; endless years of being told what and what not to do.

They never found her. They assumed she was swept downriver and into the ocean.


Okay, that was the official line. Want the truth?

On that life-changing night, she did indeed stand on the bridge. She climbed onto the railing as a bus approached,  filled with witnesses. Then she jumped. 

I was waiting below in a little boat positioned as close as I could to where she would fall into the fast-flowing river.

I’m not going to tell you where she is now. After all,  she was supposed to have taken her own life. Suffice it to say, she has a new life and a new identity.

But you didn’t hear it from me.


Image Credit; Mohamed Almari @ Pexels

25 thoughts on “A shortened story …

  1. Christine Goodnough Dec 5, 2022 / 14:50

    What an intriguing twist to this tale! Bravo for that splendid rescue. Despair, though it can be intense, may only be temporary; with the right help one can go on to live a happy life. 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    • Keith's Ramblings Dec 5, 2022 / 16:49

      Indeed Christine, at least now she won’t need to fear being sought and found.


      • Christine Goodnough Dec 5, 2022 / 17:57

        True. She won’t have any ID, cash or credit card, though. Starting from scratch.
        By the way, I checked with WP as to why I have to log in every time I comment on your blog and they say it’s the way you have your settings — or your blog configured. Which doesn’t explain why I have to log into my own at times. Oh well. 😦


  2. Sadje Dec 5, 2022 / 14:51

    I love the twist in this tale. It was a far better option than the first one. Thanks for joining in.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. Suzette Benjamin Dec 5, 2022 / 16:15

    Wow! Quite the story!! Unusual and well told. I’ve never read anything like this. Quite unique, Keith. Bravo!!

    Liked by 1 person

  4. ~just a thought Dec 5, 2022 / 19:48

    This is a wonderful story!

    Liked by 1 person

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