Today’s short story ….

for Friday Fictioneers



It was just what he’d been looking for. 

‘Interested young man?’ 

‘Possibly’ he said, ‘I’ll give you ten for it’. 

‘Haha very funny’ said the old fella walking away.

‘I’m serious’ he said. ‘How about twelve?’

The gent turned around. ‘No way’ he said ‘it’s magnificent’.

‘Fifteen?’ the young chap asked.

‘It’s fast, it’s agile, it glides…’

‘…but it’s getting on a bit’.

‘Yea, but they don’t make ‘em like this any more’.


‘Okay, eighteen thousand pounds it is’ sighed the ol’ boy looking forlornly at his boat.

‘I meant eighteen pounds! Eighteen grand for a sit-up-and-beg bicycle? You must think I’m stupid!’



Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and to CEAyr for the picture.

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53 thoughts on “Today’s short story ….

  1. Sadje Oct 14, 2020 / 17:00

    This is very astute observation Keith. I had missed the bicycle completely.

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  2. ceayr Oct 14, 2020 / 17:09

    He won’t haggle!
    Well he did, but…

    And I think you got your hundreds and thousands a bit confused at the end, old pip

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  3. Nobbinmaug Oct 14, 2020 / 17:16

    Good one. I always thought it was weird when people haggled and threw out numbers without being specific.

    Typo alert: You open with “I was just what he’d been looking for.” I’m assuming it should be, “It was just what he’d been looking for.” Unless you’re part of this bargaining as well. “No, not the bicycle or the boat. How much for the bloke?”

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  4. granonine Oct 14, 2020 / 18:06

    I wondered about using the bike in some way. You’ve done it beautifully.

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  5. James McEwan Oct 14, 2020 / 19:59

    Specifics are not the young man’s strong points. £20 please for the bicycle if you don’t mind, I’ll throw in the boat for another twenty grand.

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  6. rochellewisoff Oct 15, 2020 / 00:32

    Dear Keith,

    It’s all about the zeroes, isn’t it? You made me laugh as always.



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    • Keith's Ramblings Oct 15, 2020 / 10:54

      It is, but my guy only wanted the cycle and that’s what he thought he was bargaining for! Cheers Liz.


  7. Sandra Oct 15, 2020 / 10:18

    I only focused on the boat, so I’m feeling rather inadequate that so many people saw the bike first.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Oct 15, 2020 / 10:53

      One of my characters focused on the boat and the other, the bike! I really wouldn’t worry about it Sandra!!


  8. draliman Oct 15, 2020 / 16:53

    Ha, reminds me of the scene in Lethal Weapon where he’s buying drugs and saying “a hundred” and the dealers think he means 100k 🙂

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  9. Tannille Oct 16, 2020 / 05:21

    The cost of everything keeps going up… Well done K, you use the bike. I couldn’t get past the pink boat!

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  10. msjadeli Oct 17, 2020 / 04:56

    Youth and age, on two different wavelengths as usual. Looks like the deal is off….

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  11. subroto Oct 17, 2020 / 10:21

    The cycle is probably free with the boat. Too bad it won’t work the other way around.

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  12. Dale Oct 18, 2020 / 15:16

    Something told me from the get it was all about the bicycle…

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  13. larry trasciatti Oct 18, 2020 / 19:54

    The word, It ,doesn’t quite narrow things down. It’s interesting that you chose to focus upon the bicycle. More people must have gone for the boat

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  14. Brenda's Thoughts Oct 19, 2020 / 19:11

    Oh, that’s very funny. I hope in the end the miscommunication is cleared up and the young ‘un can ride away on his new bike.

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