A cautionary tale…

for Friday Fictioneers



It was a perfect summer’s day. They wandered hand in hand around the enchanted garden stopping now and then to look into each other’s eyes and embrace.

Serenaded by songbirds, wrapped in the warmth of the sun, intoxicated by the feelings they had for each other, they were swathed in emotion.

He picked a fragrant bloom and placed it in her hair, held a buttercup beneath her chin, and made a chain of daisies to hang around her neck.

She plucked a blushing apple from a stooping bough and they each took a bite.

Never again were they seen in the garden.




imageThanks to Rochelle for hosting and to J Hardy Carroll for the picture.

Prod the frogs to see what others have come up with!

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59 thoughts on “A cautionary tale…

  1. rochellewisoff Jan 15, 2020 / 12:37

    Dear Keith,

    I’m not sure where people got the idea it was an apple. It was the fruit plucked from the tree of the knowledge of good and evil. Hm. At any rate, I enjoyed your take on the prompt and your frog renditions. 😉



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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 15, 2020 / 15:42

      There are all kinds of theories as to what the fruit might have been, but I went with Ruben’s 17th-century painting The Fall of Man which features an apple tree! Anyway, I’m pleased you liked it and don’t worry about the frogs – they are only posing. I told them not to take a bite in case they were barred from ever entering my blog again!. Lol

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  2. neilmacdon Jan 15, 2020 / 12:41

    Personally, I blame the guy who planted the fruit and then said they couldn’t eat it. That story always seemed unkind to me

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 15, 2020 / 15:49

      They are certainly a couple of plausible theories. Of course, he could just have put a barbed wire fence around it. Anyway, too late now! Thanks for the picture by the way..


  3. Tannille Jan 15, 2020 / 13:12

    Great imagery. I always felt like I there was more to this age-old tale. God seems rather unforgiving, dare I say petty, about these sort of things.

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  4. pennygadd51 Jan 15, 2020 / 15:53

    I like your take on the prompt. The structure looks very like a biome, and reminded me of the Eden project in Cornwall. I enjoyed your description of Adam and Eve wandering hand in hand in the bliss of romantic love!

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 15, 2020 / 16:00

      I too immediately thought of the Eden Project and that’s what led me to the Garden of Eden! So pleased you liked it, Penny.

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  5. Dale Jan 15, 2020 / 19:03

    I’m with Neil. The whole thing was just a mean setup.
    Excellent write, though.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2020 / 12:47

      Absolutely, I quite agree – about my excellent writing that is!

      I’m not sure him up there approves of boasters, so I take that last but back just in case!

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  6. msjadeli Jan 15, 2020 / 20:10

    C’est la vie! The good, the bad, and the ugly. Why God wants it that way is a mystery….

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  7. Mike Jan 15, 2020 / 23:15

    I wondered how ancient apple trees really are.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2020 / 12:40

      I bought some apples the other day that were really ancient! Not nice. Cheers Mike.


  8. Sandra Jan 16, 2020 / 09:43

    The buttercup and daisy chains reminded me of days long gone. Thank goodness there were no dandelions, with their less pleasant connotations.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 16, 2020 / 12:37

      I never pick dandelions unless there’s a loo nearby! Remember plucking petals from flowers – loves me, loves me not? There’s probably an app for that nowadays!


  9. Liz Young Jan 16, 2020 / 16:48

    Why not an apple, Rochelle? It’s only symbolic anyway. Good story, Keith.

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  10. Lynn Love Jan 17, 2020 / 14:40

    Wondering if this is the original Fall, or a more recent one. Either way, magically done, Keith and I enjoyed that ambiguity – could be a Biblical tale or the opening of a crime thriller!


    • Keith's Ramblings Jan 17, 2020 / 14:57

      Given it would be read by people of different religious persuasions or none at all, I left to the reader to decide! My preference? A crime thriller!


  11. bearmkwa Jan 17, 2020 / 15:11

    That’s a unique and beautiful view of Adam & Eve. Loved it!

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  12. Nobbinmaug Jan 17, 2020 / 20:18

    Then, they realized the apple was blushing because they were naked. They put on some leaves and got out of there.

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  13. Laurie Bell Jan 17, 2020 / 20:58

    Ooooo an old story but a good one haha…
    A lovely day that turned dark so fast. Nicely told with a lyrical lazydays feel.

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  14. GHLearner Jan 18, 2020 / 21:20

    That original story was a setup. If you want people to do something, you tell them not to do it and raise their curiosity. I like your version, it’s loving and romantic. And I like to think that the bites teleported them out to some better planet without petty gods and that’s why they were never seen again.

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  15. Woman walking Max Jan 19, 2020 / 10:04

    I think they were too canny to stay in the garden, and to be forever be burdened by guilt. No future in that !

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