It’s very very dark tonight
I can’t see very far.
Look, the moon is tilting back,
to catch a falling star!
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Something’s swooping up above
A bat with spiky wings.
Wow, much too close for comfort
Not sure I like those things!
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See those shooting stars up there
flying without a sound?
I wonder where they shot from
and where they hit the ground?
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Can you see that moth there
fluttering by the light?
I wonder where he sleeps by day
He only flies at night.
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You there, no use hiding,
‘Cos darkness holds no fear.
No use trying to scare me…
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…yikes, I’m outta here!
Monday –
Previously A B C D E F G H I J K L M N O P Q R S T U V W X Y Z
In 2018 – My FriendRosey made us Lunch
In2017 – We went to Amble Bay’s Lake
If your not a children’s author, you have severely missed your calling! Every one a gem so far this month.
This is an entirely new venture Violet! I can’t thank you enough for your generous words.
Look, indeed. Children can look and see in ways we’ve forgotten. Well done!
They look differently and think differently. Things were simpler then!
Another great story.
Thanks Sadje
You’re welcome
The doubts about the shooting
star and moths are interesting and I HAD lots of questions in my childhood.
Loved your poem in story telling form.
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Thanks, I’m pleased it worked!!! I’ve always thought it strange that moths are attracted by light, so surely it would be more sensible if they came out during the day, not the night!
That was really good! There’s some great imagery in the words and you can imagine the narrator ducking and running away. I see from the other comments that this is a new venture but personally I think it’s one that should continue. You’re really talented!
Lacey, I’m so pleased you enjoyed it and I cant thank you enough for you kind words
Children can teach adults not just to look but to actually see. Great poem!
Absolutely. They see things as they are, not influenced by things they’ve seen in the past. Thanks once again Nilanjana.
Again, a really fun piece. Love the closing lines. I agree with Violet.
That’s really kind of you Stuart.
Oh, to see again through the eyes of a child. Your vivid
imagination must keep you awake nights, Keith.
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It’s funny you should should mention that! The best stories always wake me up in the early hours. I’m off for a nap – bye!
Oh my, that is a wonderful poem. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
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That type I can manage, anything more lyrical is beyond me! Cheers.
Add a couple more verses and you could have a great children’s picture book. I kept seeing the images for each verse!
DB McNicol, author
Microfiction: Lemonade Stand
I might just add a few! Thanks so much Donna
I really enjoyed this – this could totally be made into a kid’s picture book
Debbie
One day maybe! Who knows? Thanks Debbie
Cute poem! I always thought bats were lovely, though…
The Multicolored Diary
Each .to their own! Cheers
Awww, that was so cute, and visual. I liked “seeing” what you wrote about. Found you through Bee After You’s blog, and hope you’re enjoying the A to Z challenge… http://www.lisabuiecollard.com
Thanks for dropping by and your kind words. I’ll be over to visit you very soon.
Keith,
What a lovely little poem! It’s interesting how many children share the fear of the dark. I had a little trouble with it but I talked myself out of my worries most of the time. That being said, on rare occasions, I still won’t let my feet dangle over the bed’s edge for fear something will grab them. lol
Thanks for visiting A2Z Little Mermaid art sketch Chef Louis post over the weekend. I’m playing catch up still! Have a good week and happy a2zing!
I’ll be woried about feet danling now! Thanks once again Cathy