One hundred and ninety-four words…

for Sunday Photo Fiction.

Those of us participating in the A-Z Challenge get a day off today, so as a change from writing one children’s story after another, I decided to do something completely different. As they say, a change is as good a rest!




She was never one to drink much, so when she left the bar late that night I thought perhaps I should follow her. But instead, I stood and watched as she walked towards the bridge. I knew what she was about to do but I felt this was one decision she should make for herself. I didn’t try to stop her. After all, her life had been one spell of misery after another; endless years of being told what and what not to do and I wasn’t going to add to it.

They never found her. They assumed she was swept down river and into the ocean.




At least, that’s what I tell people. Want the truth?

On that life-changing night, she did stand on the bridge. She waited until a bus approached so there’d be witnesses, then she jumped. I  sat below in a dinghy as close as I could to where she’d fall into the fast flowing water.

I’m not telling you where she is now. After all,  she was supposed to have taken her life. Suffice to say, she’s had a new start far away with a new identity.

But you didn’t hear it from me. Okay?




Thanks to Susan Spaulding for hosting Sunday Photo Fiction and C E Ayr for the picture.


31 thoughts on “One hundred and ninety-four words…

  1. Denise Apr 7, 2019 / 13:45

    Hah! Just watched a rerun last night of Midsomer Murders where a young woman had supposedly died in a car that went into a river. NOT. Nice twist in your story.

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  2. Christine Goodnough Apr 7, 2019 / 15:22

    Well, this is a brilliant take on the prompt and an intriguing twist. However, you’ve just blabbed her secret to the world; you can expect investigators at your door in about an hour. 😉

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      • Christine Goodnough Apr 7, 2019 / 21:22

        I just read about a fellow who was arrested for theft — and got 6 months. It was his more-or-less 49th conviction for theft under $1000.
        But you better be gone, or they’ll nab for this and give you twenty years. 😉

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  3. ceayr Apr 7, 2019 / 20:01

    Terrific piece, Keith, one of the best things I’ve seen from you, old bean!

    Liked by 1 person

  4. QP and Eye Apr 7, 2019 / 23:28

    Sometimes we have to stand and allow things to unfold; it’s how friendship rolls. Well done!

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  5. Abhijit Ray Apr 8, 2019 / 11:44

    So many dreams. But he is only a kid. Let him grow old. He will know these are all dreams.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Apr 8, 2019 / 11:48

      This somehow seems to have landed under the wrong post! Dreams can come true, let’s wait and see! Cheers Abhijit


      • Abhijit Ray Apr 8, 2019 / 12:10

        Certainly dreams come true. But a waiter falling is a naughty dream.

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      • Keith's Ramblings Apr 8, 2019 / 13:57

        Kids have naughty dreams – as I recall! Cheers Abhijit


  6. Susan Apr 13, 2019 / 19:22

    A new life, a new start. Was there insurance money involved?

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