Friday Fictioneers

 

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In the mansion beyond the red brick wall fires crackled, tables groaned with food and servants fetched and carried. Daily, footmen prepared the master’s carriage for his visit to the factory where he walked between clanging machines, his loyal workers stooping as he passed.

Days were good back then.

Five scruffy urchins played in the dust whilst their mother prepared scraps of food. If her husband caught enough rats today, he’d earn a shilling with which to buy more food tomorrow. Soon their eldest son would be six and strong enough to sweep the chimneys of the mansion beyond the red brick wall.

Days were dark back then.

 

ronda-del-boccioThanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers and to Ronda Del Boccio for the picture. 

77 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers

  1. Iain Kelly August 8, 2018 / 11:07

    Has it really changed much since then? I think that wall still exists, even if not so literally now.

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  2. Sandra August 8, 2018 / 11:20

    It was ever thus, two sides of the same coin. Nicely done.

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  3. Christine Goodnough August 8, 2018 / 14:12

    Excellent picture of “the good old days.” We need to appreciate the “mobility” choices we have today. Before 1900, where you were born was almost always where you lived and died.

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  4. abhiray59 August 8, 2018 / 16:20

    A red brick wall separates have and have nots.

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  5. paulmclem August 8, 2018 / 16:33

    Nice idea. One tiny wee crit, I think you need some commas in the first sentence i.e. perhaps something like “In the mansion, beyond the red brick wall, fires crackled”.

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    • Keith's Ramblings August 9, 2018 / 08:56

      You have no idea how many times I added and deleted commas and semi-colons whilst writing this! In the end, I stuck to the version the Grammarly app approved of!

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  6. pennygadd51 August 8, 2018 / 16:43

    You make excellent use of the huge contrasts between rich and poor to give your story energy.

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  7. michael1148humphris August 8, 2018 / 18:32

    True then and true today. It is a divide which seems to be get worse,

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  8. gahlearner August 8, 2018 / 18:53

    It seems as if nothing has changed. The divide is still there, only the places have changed.

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  9. hilarymb August 8, 2018 / 21:34

    Hi Keith – yes it’s interesting how life has changed, yet hasn’t … now there’s more opportunity for more rats, as well as for clambering out of the hell hole … equally there should be more opportunity for people with privilege, or with enough to consider and remember others. Great story telling though – really ‘impaled’ the values … cheers Hilary

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  10. 4963andypop August 8, 2018 / 22:25

    “They were the best of times, they were the worst of times… “(tale of two cities, charles dickens. ). You are in good company on this theme!

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  11. Denise Covey August 9, 2018 / 01:36

    Hi Keith! Very clever take on the prompt! I’ve come by to let you know WEP has joined with the Insecure Writers Support Group which will lead us to bigger and better things. If you’re interested in expanding your readership, please pop by the WEP site and see if the current prompt, CHANGE OF HEART gets your heart pumping!

    Denise

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    • Keith's Ramblings August 9, 2018 / 09:02

      I’ve been meaning to pop over to WEP again for some time. Thanks for the reminder, Denise.

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  12. Piyali August 9, 2018 / 09:39

    A very realistic picture you drew with your words. I liked the contrast. The story sucked me right in.

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  13. rochellewisoff August 9, 2018 / 13:09

    Dear Keith,

    I found this two-sides-of-the-brick wall story hauntingly well written. Good job.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  14. Reena Saxena August 9, 2018 / 18:01

    The contrast is depicted beautifully. It is always the plight of children which saddens us.

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  15. granonine August 9, 2018 / 20:47

    All that from a pot of grass. Outstanding. I love the comparison/contrast.

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  16. Elizabeth Young August 10, 2018 / 06:26

    Good piece of social comment. My daughter’s cottage in Ireland has a chimney wide enough for a man, let alone a child!

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  17. draliman August 10, 2018 / 07:49

    Hubby should cut out the middle man and just eat the rats 🙂
    I like the two sides to your scene, the haves and have-nots.

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  18. prior.. August 10, 2018 / 10:23

    wel I just so happened to write about darkness related to work – but more present day –
    and how extra nice to red your take here. It really reminds us to be grateful (or can have that message)

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  19. Brenda's Thoughts August 10, 2018 / 10:37

    I enjoyed the way you portrayed two different perspectives of a single time period. It’s all about the person telling the story, isn’t it? A very nice thought-provoking piece. =)

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  20. Susan August 11, 2018 / 16:09

    I think this is the message behind ‘Build the wall’. Well done.

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  21. Emily in Ecuador August 14, 2018 / 15:35

    Oh wow I thought they were going to eat the rats. I’m so glad they are able to exchange them for money for food. Thanks, Keith, for allowing him to exchange the rats instead of cook them.

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