A short story …

May 9, 2020May 9, 2020Keith's Ramblings

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where the given word is Home and the limit, 114 words precisely.

‘Please slow down Daddy’ cried a sad little voice.

He was driving too fast, desperate to get home. The tyres protested as he swerved his way along the winding road.

‘Not so fast Daddy, please’

A pigeon flew towards him. He stabbed the brakes. The car jerked, bashing his head against the window.

‘I’m scared Daddy’

‘SHUT UP!’ he yelled.

He skidded to a halt, turned his head and stared at an empty child-seat.

From his pocket, he took a photo. A picture of the precious child he lost in an accident. He’d been to blame, he’d been driving too fast.

A tear trickled down his cheek.

‘I love you Daddy’ whispered a voice.

crispina kemp May 9, 2020 / 13:16

Sad.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:55
  
  Indeed. Thanks for dropping by.
  
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Sadje May 9, 2020 / 15:22

So moving.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:55
  
  Thanks Sadje
  
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  - Sadje May 10, 2020 / 13:41
    
    You’re welcome 😇
    
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pensitivity101 May 9, 2020 / 15:26

gut wrenching Keith

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:57
  
  Thanks Di.
  
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Dale May 9, 2020 / 21:40

Oh Keith… You went for the sucker punch!
Well, done, though.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:53
  
  I tried! Thanks Dale.
  
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  - Dale May 10, 2020 / 14:53
    
    Ya done good.
    
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rochellewisoff May 9, 2020 / 23:01

Dear Keith,

Oh, how tragic. 😦 Well written…but…so sad.

Shalom,

Rochelle

Here’s mine https://rochellewisoff.com/2020/05/09/weekend-writing-prompt-war-wound/

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:52
  
  Thanks Rochelle.
  
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messymimi's meanderings May 10, 2020 / 01:03

The worst tragedies are the ones we cause ourselves.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:51
  
  Indeed they are. Cheers Mimi.
  
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msjadeli May 10, 2020 / 05:49

Oh this one is a real tear-jerker. Too often we see these things after the damage is done 😦

Keith, not sure if you want to participate in this or not, but I’ve tagged you to write a chapter in a story:
http://tao-talk.com/2020/05/10/finish-the-story-the-house-on-clearwater-lake/

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:50
  
  Thanks, indeed we do.
  
  Thanks for the invite. I’m in!
  
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  - msjadeli May 10, 2020 / 17:49
    
    🙂 Great, Keith!
    
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soniadogra May 10, 2020 / 10:40

How sad! I can imagine how the daddy is haunted by the past every moment.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 10, 2020 / 11:49
  
  Thanks so much Sonia.
  
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ceayr May 10, 2020 / 15:34

Well, well, quite a change for you, old pip.
And you jerked the tears to great effect.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 11, 2020 / 13:44
  
  Oh, I have my moments. Not often, but now and again!
  
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Na'ama Yehuda May 10, 2020 / 18:23

Oy. Oy vey.
These are the worst.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 11, 2020 / 13:33
  
  Indeed. Thanks Na’ama.
  
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Jess Schira May 11, 2020 / 02:52

Wow! Great and heartbreaking twist.

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- Keith's Ramblings May 11, 2020 / 13:30
  
  Cheers Jess
  
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Annette Kalandros May 11, 2020 / 14:46

Killer ending! When the reader realizes it is a memory– extremely well done.

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