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I lived in her shadow for too long. She could do nothing wrong. Admired, loved, applauded. Little Miss Perfect.
Me? Ignored, invisible. Unwanted.
Then one day she disappeared. Just like that. I should be sad, she was my sister after all.
Now things have changed. Suddenly I’m needed. After all, I’m all they have.
At last, the sun is shining upon me. The tree that cast the shadow, felled.
What happened to her? Where did she go? Nobody knows.
Actually, that’s not entirely true. One person knows. The lumberjack knows.
And I’ll take my secret to the grave.
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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and to Brenda Cox for the picture.
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A dark story Keith.
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Even darker when the shadow was still there! Thanks, Sadje.
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You’re welcome!
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That’s sad. Great take, Keith!
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Thanks so much, Shweta.
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You’re very welcome
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I wonder if the narrator will continue to enjoy his ‘place in the sun’.
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For the time being at least! Thanks, Sandra.
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Ooh, a dark vengeance-filled tale. Murdered by the lumberjack too! Nice one, Keith.
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Oh yes! Cheers Mason.
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Cheers, Keith!
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Sinister! And shades of CE, with the staccato sentences and bloody conclusion. Good one, Keith!
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…now you come to mention it! I’m really missing his stories. Thanks, Penny,
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So am I. He was one of my ‘go to’ stories every week.
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Wow. Not the light-hearted story we’ve gotten from you lately. Well- told, dark emotions, atmospheric. Good one.
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As they say, a change is as good a rest! Thanks so much, Linda.
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Keith, what a deliciously sinister tale. You really got into the head of your MC.
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Perhaps I am the MC! Only kidding, thanks, Lisa!
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🙂 You’re welcome.
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Muahahahaha! This will probably come to bite him in the arse…
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That would be a bummer! Cheers Dale.
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😊
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Dear Keith,
Is this a secret the narrator can live with? Dark and sinister tale. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I don’t think I could! Thanks so much, Rochelle.
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I wonder how long he will shine until the lumberjack returns. I really enjoyed the voice of this one. Well written, Keith!
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Thanks so much for your kind words, and for supplying the prompt Brenda.
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if anything, he should enjoy the sunshine while it lasts.
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I doubt he’ll get away with it after writing this admission! Cheers plaridel.
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Gosh! I came back to read something easy-breezy your style and this took me by surprise. Good one, Keith.
I’ll be writing one too this week.
Have a good rest of the week.
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Surprise! Fear not, normal service will be resumed shortly!
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Sinister! Nice one, Keith!
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Thanks so much, Veronica.
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Hi Keith – that could so easily turn into a longer story … but briefly brilliantly told – gravely done … cheers Hilary
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The first draft was a lot longer. Getting a message across in a hundred words is quite a challenge! Thanks, Hilary.
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Evil, evil fun, your story. And clever how you identify the lumberjack in the end.
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Probably a mistake, now I’m waiting for a knock on my door!
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Not easy to express that much emotion and drama in so few words, Keith. A good model for all writers.
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I can’t thank you enough for your kind words, Gail.
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An interesting change of tack,and well told.
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I thought I’d put the humour on hold for a week! Thanks, Michael.
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Keith,
A sinister take on the prompt for sure. A tree and a sister felled in one day. Now she’ll live under the shadow of that grisly deed instead.
pax,
dora
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Absolutely so. Thanks so much, Dora.
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Well, I have read the story & skimmed the comments. hmmmm Well, all I know you have helped one sister & brother get together! My hubby & his sister has been arguing for a few weeks now & I had them both read the story which lead to a phone call, a few apologies, a tear or two and a smooch! THANK YOU SO MUCH! It really kinda broke my heart to see them to argue so much, but I think that’s all over with now! THANKS AGAIN MY FRIEND! YOU’RE DUH BEST! HUGSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS
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I’m delighted to have been of service in what was clearly a worrying situation. Thanks so much for your lovely comment. You’ve got me welling up now!
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Seems to me she had it coming!
Nicely dark, Keith.
Why do people always make such a fuss of the perfect ones?
Imperfection is so much more fun!
Great story.
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I could not agree more! Life in the fast lane is so much better. Thanks so much Jenne.
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Thanks for reminding why it’s great to be an only child. Fantastic story. Channeled your inner CE!
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He’s an only child now! My inner CE – I like that! Cheers Tannille.
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One day, they say, the lumberjack will come for you–can’t wait.
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Don’t forget, he sleeps all night and works all day!
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Sinister protagonist Keith, well done.
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Thank you, Michael.
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Oy vey! It is often the quiet ones who need watching …. Yikes! Well written, as per usual, my friend!
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Too true Na’ama! Thanks so much.
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🙂
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I like the analogy with the trees. A dark tale, but a cute chainsaw-wielding frog!
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I’m pleased, thanks so much Ali.
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One of your best!
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That’s really kind of you Alicia, thank you.
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Not kindness. TRUTH!
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Indeed. Thanks Alicia.
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I like the analogy of felling the tree that cast the shadow and the lumberjack. Nice, sinister story.
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Thanks so much Nobbin.
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Oh ouch! Now there is a sibling rivalry!
Sounds like he both won and lost.
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Perfectly put Laurie.
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Wonder, if guilt will allow ‘ME’ to enjoy all the attention.
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I wonder! Thanks for dropping by Usha.
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My pleasure.
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