Forty-four words… – Keith's Ramblings

Forty-four words…

Oct 26, 2019Oct 26, 2019Keith's Ramblings

for Sammi’s Weekend Writing Prompt where we are challenged to write 44 words about Twilight.

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Her eyes

a mist of grey

like twilight,

that sparkle, gone.

.

I ask why,

she hears me not.

I will wait

as long as it takes

for her return.

.

But for now

she’s in a place of her own.

.

Somewhere.

.

I know not where.

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Sadje Oct 26, 2019 / 12:49

Poignant.

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 26, 2019 / 12:51
  
  Thanks so much Sadje
  
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  - Sadje Oct 26, 2019 / 13:34
    
    A pleasure Keith.
    
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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:19
  
  Thank you Sadje
  
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rochellewisoff Oct 26, 2019 / 13:02

How sweet and wistful, Keith. You’ve used your 44 words well.

Shalom,

Rochelle

Here’s mine: https://rochellewisoff.com/2019/10/26/weekend-writing-prompt-twilight/

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Sally Oct 26, 2019 / 14:37

Brilliant.

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:18
  
  Thanks Sally
  
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Christine Goodnough Oct 26, 2019 / 14:52

Very well spun out and heart-touching!

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:18
  
  Thanks Christine
  
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Na'ama Yehuda Oct 26, 2019 / 16:27

Whoa! Talk about twilight material … Well woven!

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:18
  
  Thanks so much Na’ama
  
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  - Na'ama Yehuda Oct 27, 2019 / 16:14
    
    🙂
    
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Dale Oct 26, 2019 / 17:20

Oh how poignant and wistful and heart-touching (using all of the above in one)

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:15
  
  Not my usual style which makes your lovely comment even more special.
  
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messymimi's meanderings Oct 26, 2019 / 19:50

So sad, whether due to age or other reasons, when the mind has left to wander and even love cannot follow.

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 10:14
  
  Indeed it is. Thanks Mimi.
  
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hilarymb Oct 27, 2019 / 12:35

Hi Keith – so right with the recent weather … mists of time … delightful and sad 44 words … cheers Hilary

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 27, 2019 / 16:03
  
  That’s most kind of you Hilary, thank you.
  
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Avia Tinder Oct 30, 2019 / 00:44

Oh my, I’m hushed…exquisitely beautiful, and yes, poignant.

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- Keith's Ramblings Oct 31, 2019 / 09:32
  
  That’s really nice of you, thanks so much.
  
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  - Avia Tinder Oct 31, 2019 / 10:10
    
    You’re quite welcome, Sir.
    
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MythRider Nov 15, 2019 / 19:32

Beautifully written. I especially like the eye. Did you draw it?

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- Keith's Ramblings Nov 17, 2019 / 11:08
  
  I didn’t, but I wish I had! Thanks so much.
  
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