A few words…

Keith's Ramblings

for Friday Fictioneers

 

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They agreed to meet at the signpost in the park. After months of slowly drifting apart, they’d reached a crossroads.  Which way to go? 

Walking slowly, heads bowed, the only sound was the swishing of grass beneath their feet. 

He picked her a flower, she pushed it away. He tickling her nose with it and saw a hint of a smile.

He held her arm as they descended some steps then they strolled hand in hand towards the lake.  Still, not a word passed between them.

They sat in silence watching two swans, then slowly turned to face each other. 

The signpost became a distant memory.

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Thanks to Rochelle for hosting and Dale Rogerson for the photo.

Prod the frogs to join in the fun.

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73 thoughts on “A few words…”

  1. Tannille Oct 2, 2019 / 11:51

    Not sure she liked her nose being tickled?
    I liked the quietness of this story.

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  3. rochellewisoff Oct 2, 2019 / 13:05

    Dear Keith,

    Such a sweet meeting. I hope this is the beginning of a beautiful friendship. ❤

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  8. Sandra Oct 2, 2019 / 17:39

    Quite a departure for you, Keith, and beautifully done, in a restrained, understated way.

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    • Keith's Ramblings Oct 2, 2019 / 17:49

      I admit my finger hovered over the publish button for a while wondering if I was doing the right thing! Thanks so much for your encouraging words Sandra.

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      • Sandra Oct 2, 2019 / 18:00

        I sometimes feel that way myself when I write out of character. Indulge yourself – it was certainly worth it.

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  9. M K Zebra Oct 2, 2019 / 18:32

    I like this a lot – I really recognise that crossroads moment and the fear that your heart is about to get broken. I’m glad this couple turn it around.

    Hooray as well for this being a departure from your usual style, and you’ve done a really good job. I tried writing romance recently and it turned somehow into a dark political fantasy with love in sight. 🙈

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  10. granonine Oct 2, 2019 / 18:37

    Neil, you’ve been quite the romantic lately. Loved the quietness and the happy ending.

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    • granonine Oct 2, 2019 / 18:41

      Don’t know why I said “Neil.” He must have been the last one I read before yours. Keith. I knew it was you 🙂

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    • Keith's Ramblings Oct 3, 2019 / 10:20

      As they say, a change is as good as rest! Normal service will be resumed shortly!

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      • Keith's Ramblings Oct 3, 2019 / 10:41

        What a lovely gesture. I just visited your post, and it’s informative as well as proof that opposites attract!

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      • pensitivity101 Oct 3, 2019 / 11:07

        Thanks Keith. Hubby and I have been together over 30 years now and our backgrounds are totally different, yet we are your traditional pair of old comfy slippers.

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  13. Dale Oct 3, 2019 / 06:12

    This was absolutely lovely, Keith… You softie, you!

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  15. draliman Oct 3, 2019 / 12:55

    Aw, young love 🙂 You’ve been at the Photoshop again, fun!

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  16. msjadeli Oct 3, 2019 / 15:52

    So romantic, Keith. I love the delicacy of the story, with the lovely swans at the end, one wonder replaced with another. And you know I love your froggies, this time a gentleman and a lady.

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  20. Inside the Mind of Isadora Oct 4, 2019 / 14:46

    A lyrically fluid sensitive write, Keith. I could feel the hesitations between them.
    Perhaps, there could be a hopeful connection. Nicely written … loved it.
    Isadora 😎

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  21. pennygadd51 Oct 4, 2019 / 15:00

    I liked the way you made use of the fidelity of swans to emphasize that this couple were truly in love. Nice romance, Keith.

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  23. darlamsands Oct 4, 2019 / 17:41

    How sweet. I envisioned the couple as young in my first read, then aged in the second. Thank you for sharing!

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  27. 4963andypop Oct 5, 2019 / 22:08

    From bittersweet resignation to sweet reconnection. Nicely understated Keith. Understatement is a tool rarely utilized in our garish, high-beam headlight media world.

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  28. Rowena Oct 7, 2019 / 13:49

    Keith, this was beautifully poignant and unlike my character, yours seem to be heading onward and upwards. Happy days ahead.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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