“Who’s there?”
“Disguise”
“Disguise who?”
“Disguise in love with you!”
They did it every night when John got home.
“Why the funny voice?” Lea giggled.
“Knock-knock”
“John, you’re scaring me”
She opened the door, just a little. A man in a hoodie barged his way in and thumped the lightswitch plunging the flat into darkness.
“Get out” yelled Lea.
He lowered his hood and shone a torch from beneath his chin.
“I said I’d find you Lea”
What the hell do you want Mike?”
“Stupid question Lea. I’m collecting what’s mine”
Nothing.
“Knock-knock”, louder.
“Lea, knock-knock sweetheart!”
Silence.
John unlocked the door.
Lea was nowhere to be seen.
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Friday Fictioneers is hosted by Rochelle. This week’s photo is by J Hardy Carroll
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Novel story-telling. The juxtaposition of the knock knock joke with the horror story really works.
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I hoped it might – it’s nothing like my normal style! Thanks so much.
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Very clever how you wove the horror into ‘innocent’ knock knock jokes. Chillingly done, Keith.
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Bit of this, bit of that! Thanks so much, Susan
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Excellent and novel little chiller, Keith. You did it very well. I wonder whether John is the sort of guy who will go looking for Lea to rescue her.
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I’m certain he will! Thanks, Penny.
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That’s a cracker of an idea, and structured in a novel, scary but almost amusing way. You excelled yourself this week.
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Thanks so much, Sandra, that’s so kind of you. – to be honest, I spent longer fiddling and formatting than I did writing it!
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A fantastic thriller. I enjoyed the way your structured it!
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I hesitated before pressing the publish button as I was unsure if it worked! Thanks so much Brenda.
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It certainly did work, Keith!
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Must agree with everyone, Keith. Fantabulous idea of mixing innocent fun with horror.
Poor Lea! Go get her, John!
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That’s really nice of you Dale. Go John!
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Will never see knock-knock jokes the same again…chilling!
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knock-knock…! Cheers Gisselle
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Terrifying in its simplicity Keith, very well done, and a refreshing change of tone.
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A change is as good as a rest I’m told! Thanks Iain.
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Wow. So very scary, especially these days.
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It happens, sadly. Cheers Mimi
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Yikes! How scary .. and alas how true a terror for many who live with domestic violence, stalking, and abusers.
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Not nice at all. Thanks Na’ama
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Chilling! Barging in and kidnapping a human being.
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Thanks so much Abhijit
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Hi Keith – not nice at all … glad it’s a sunny day! I imagine it happens … well told – cheers Hilary
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I’m sure it does, but hopefully never in my apartment block!
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I love the way you wrote this. It made it all the more scary!
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I’m pleased it worked! Thanks Draliman
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Knock knock
Who’s there?
UX
UX who?
You excelled yourself this week, Keith
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Nice one CE! Thanks so much.
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Knock Knock. Who’s there? S’only me saying, Unusual story, well told, Keith.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you for knocking on my door once again Rochelle!
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Not a knock-knock joke at all… pretty scary little story you have here!
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Not the sort we enjoy anyway! Delighted to have scared you Jelli
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This is creepy on so many levels. That Mike bloke must have watched them for some time. I echo what others said, excellent story telling.
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I saw Mike as Lea’s ex who’d been watching her for a while. I’m so pleased you enjoyed it
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I hate Mike.
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Me too! Cheers Alice
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I don’t have anything fresh to say, so I’ll just say well done.
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That’s more than enough! Thanks so much.
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Oh dear – that doesn’t bode well for Lea!
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I’ve no idea where she is now. I’m waiting for my muse to give me a clue!
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Oh no. That is great. So well told Keith. Clever use of the joke, no futher explanation needed.
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Thanks so much Laurie, I’m so pleased you enjoyed it
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Loved that you are trying out differing styles.
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Variety is the spice of life! Cheers Michael
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definitely one of your best. well done.
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Thanks so much Plaridel
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The form of storytelling is really interesting! Knock-knock also adds an eerie feeling to the whole story!
Very innovative writing on the prompt.
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Thanks for your kind words.
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Oh, Keith! Really, really well done. The introduction of Mike into the story was just terrifying!
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Very kind of you, thanks so much.
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Frightening tale in a whimsical form, Keith. Welldone …
Isadora 😎
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Delighted to have frightened you Isadora!
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👍🏻😄
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Chilling write. I love the writing style of it too.
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Thanks so much Lisa
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Oh! The beginning was so sweet, the middle terrifying, the end sad. Excellent stuff!
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Three in one! Thanks Sascha
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🙂
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Oh what a great approach. As others have said, the juxtaposition of the joke with the horror of the narrative works really well. And there’s a lesson here not to be too predictable.
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So true! Thanks so much for your kind words Margaret
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Nice one. It really drives home the danger of predictable public habits.
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Very true, you never know who might take advantage. Thanks so much.
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Wowzers! This is one of your best. You did a great job of turning the knock knock joke on its ear.
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Alicia, thank you so much.
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Captured my attention from the beginning. A thrilling read, well done Keith!
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I’m really pleased! Thanks so much for dropping by.
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Scary stuff! And well written too!
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Thanks Russell
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Absolutely brilliant storytelling! 😀
Pure genius!
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I can’t thank you enough for your generous words.
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Reblogged this on The Dark Netizen and commented:
This is genius storytelling! 😀
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Thank you so much – I’m honoured!
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What a terrifying tale, Keith. You took us from lighthearted fun to horror in a matter of minutes. Poor Lea and poor John. Great storytelling!
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Thanks for your kind words Deborah
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The past catching up… what a chilling thing… our stories had a lot in common this week
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They did indeed! Thanks Björn
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Great story
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Thanks so much Shirley
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That was different and very effective. Nicely done
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Thanks so much Michael
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Scary! She is a smart girl to get out.
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