Friday Fictioneers

Keith's Ramblings

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He watches as the waiter tidies the mugs then returns to the kitchen. His phone vibrates. A message. Rear RHS 410 6750. He walks to the table, picks up a mug from the back of the right-hand stack and scoops up a key. He pours some coffee, returns to his seat, and makes polite conversation with a person at the next table. He drinks the coffee then leaves the dining room.

Enters lift, punches button four. Along the corridor to room 410. Enters room, locates the safe, keys in 6750, opens the door and removes an envelope. Exits the room, leaves the hotel.

Mission accomplished.

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dinner-table-priorFriday Fictioneers is hosted by Rochelle. Thanks to Priorhouse for the photo.

91 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers”

  2. rochellewisoff Sep 26, 2018 / 12:01

    Dear Keith,

    And we’re left wondering what’s in the envelope. Love the cloak and dagger feel to this piece. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Keith's Ramblings Sep 26, 2018 / 12:46

      I’d been anxiously awaiting my first comment in the hope the ‘cloak and dagger feel’ came across. Phew – I’m relieved! Thanks so much, Rochelle

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  3. ceayr Sep 26, 2018 / 13:17

    Quite the John le Carré, Keith, although somewhat more succinct!

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  6. Iain Kelly Sep 26, 2018 / 14:19

    A smooth operation – spy films would be a lot shorter if all went to plan like this!

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  8. Dale Sep 26, 2018 / 17:03

    Now I’ve got the Mission Impossible music in my head!
    Good stuff, Keith.

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  9. pennygadd51 Sep 26, 2018 / 18:46

    I like the way you use the stack of mugs in the photoprompt as the inspiration for this skilfully planned and coolly executed story!

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  11. michael1148humphris Sep 26, 2018 / 20:56

    I reckon that it is a good job that no one accidentally knocked over the stack of mugs. 🙂

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  12. Prior... Sep 26, 2018 / 21:02

    Keith – this felt like a great movie snippet (and maybe this could be what my guys are up to in my fiction for this photo)

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  14. 4963andypop Sep 26, 2018 / 23:51

    Secret codes, secret agent man, and not a shot fired. That’s when you know you’re good. 🙂

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  17. Abhijit Ray Sep 27, 2018 / 03:40

    Well planned and executed heist. Nice!

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  18. anuragbakhshi Sep 27, 2018 / 06:49

    No assassins in the corridor or femme fatales on the bed? Blah! The life of these secret agents is so boring 🙂

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  20. Joe Owens Sep 27, 2018 / 10:35

    I expected a gunshot at any moment. Nice story Keith, keep up the great work.

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  22. James McEwan Sep 27, 2018 / 12:36

    A world of intrigue, couldn’t afford a stamp? A snippet from the world of James Bond – I expect.

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  26. Rowena Sep 27, 2018 / 15:38

    Very well executed, Keith. Went like clockwork. Or, did it go too well and a surprise lies just around the corner?
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  27. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) Sep 27, 2018 / 19:55

    I think he has covered his tracks… and we will never know what was in the envelope, unless it’s the name of a victim and the first payment for a hit job.

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  29. Jacob C. Edwards Sep 28, 2018 / 08:39

    Do you think he takes his coffee with two sugars, shaken not stirred? Haha, I liked it, you captured the suave spy vibe perfectly.

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  31. Ellie Scott Sep 28, 2018 / 11:53

    I love the sudden pickup in pace in the second paragraph to build tension. But the question is, what’s in the envelope?!

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  32. subroto Sep 28, 2018 / 12:30

    And the spy’s mission unfolds. But looks like Bond has changed from drinking Martinis to coffee.

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  37. StuHN Sep 28, 2018 / 23:01

    Could have been inserted into any great spy novel. Your mission, should you choose to accept it…

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      • Na'ama Yehuda Sep 30, 2018 / 18:39

        I figure, a spy should always assume they aren’t the only spy doing the spying and may themselves be an object of being spied on … 🙂

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  42. Anshu Bhojnagarwala Oct 1, 2018 / 07:49

    Ooh, the waiter is in it too! I am intrigued…what’s in the envelope?? Do write a sequel to it, would be lovely to read.

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