Tom hadn’t been back for seventeen years. The coffee bar was still there. He ventured inside.
He noticed a girl, drinking a smoothie whilst staring at her mobile phone the way teenagers do. Something about her reminded him of Alison. They used to sit there. They even scratched their initials on the tabletop! He wondered if they were still there.
The girl stood to leave, looked across, smiled and was gone.
*
Last time he and Alison were there they’d argued and she’d stormed out. He never saw her again. Her final words flooded his mind…
“By the way, you are going to be a father”.
For Friday Fictioneers which is hosted by Rochelle. This weeks picture is from Roger Bultot
I kinda saw that ending coming. Any idea where the pic was taken?
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I don’t think he did! No idea about the location. I tried enlarging it to read the notice boards but to no avail. Busy place, it must be good!
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It’s the Great Hall at the Metropolitan Museum of Art in New York City.
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The Great Hall. I knew I had seen it before.
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devastating
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Indeed. Thanks, Neil.
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Now that’s an encounter to bring you up short! Well done.
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It’s certainly got him wondering! Cheers Sandra.
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Dear Keith,
It doesn’t seem like Alison gave him a chance. Are you hinting that the girl might be his daughter? Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I think they sensed a connection, and yes, she’s his daughter although she doesn’t know it.
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Good catch, Rochelle!
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Wow! Very inventive – and I wonder if he’ll discover whether she really is his daughter.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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I’d like to think so, I really like happy endings!
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Awwww
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That’s exactly what I thought!
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I take it she didn’t ask for child support.
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Haha! Not this time! Cheers James.
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bah! good one James
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Very well put together, Keith. Clever. I hope they get to meet each other.
Best wishes,
Rowena
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Who knows? They probably would have it I’d broken the word count rule!
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I like your story. I’m not so sure that I’d wish them to meet up. There’ll be an awful lot of emotional baggage. The girl is happy – why encumber her with a father who’s never been there for her?
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You are probably right Penny 17 years is a long time and people move on.
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What a horrible thing for her to do.
And, he, for not pursuing her to at least have a part in his future child’s life…
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Who knows what goes on in peoples minds? Had I been allowed 100 more words I think he’d have followed her. Cheers Dale
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It can’t just be a coincidence, can it?
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Divine intervention maybe?
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OMG! That was like the best ending ever!
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Wow, thank you so much!
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I hope they meet again
Great that he got to meet his daughter. Small wonder she reminded him of Alison.
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I’d like to think they meet, and given another hundred words they might well have done. But we’ll never know!
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whoa – it could be his daughter – cool story
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They saw something familiar in each other’s eyes. Cheers Prior
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🙂
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The daughter slipped out of his reach. Hostory repeating once again ….
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It happens, and too often I fear. Cheers Reena
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A poignant and well crafted story – I think the ‘minimalism’ of the described events ractchets up the emotional power. Well done.
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I’m delighted it worked for you. Thanks so much, WWM
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Hm… that is some last word! Love can be cruel, eh? Well done!
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Too right as I well know! Thanks Courtney
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A moving story, very well expressed. I could feel his loss and his longing.
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That’s so kind of you Edith, thank you.
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Hmm… In real life the resemblance to Amy is probably just a coincidence or wishful thinking. In fictional land, sounds like maybe Tom has just seen someone much more related to him than he realizes!
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There are various possibilities as you rightly say. Thanks Joy
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Not very fair of Alison to cut him out of his own child’s life like that, no matter what the argument was about.
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Sadly it happens. Thanks MImi
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Clever story, Keith, well crafted
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Thanks very much, CE.
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I hope he caught up with her and talked. Glad someone asked about the photo because I was wondering.
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Haha! If it had been a London landmark I’d have been fine! Thanks Liz.
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Ooh, will he chase after her, will he just leave well enough alone… nice one!
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Had the story continued I’d have got him to follow her! Cheers.
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How could he forget such a parting shot? And he didn’t follow her out? The cad!
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I’d like to think this event got him thinking. Thanks, Alice.
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Father finally meets daughter, and neither of them knows it. Good one 🙂
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Exactly. Thanks for dropping by.Granonine
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A nice story, hopefully, they can be reunited after so many years apart. =)
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Hopefully.Thank you so much, Brenda.
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I’m sure he’s having a few “what if’s” running through his head.
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I’m sure his mind’s racing. Do something or forget it. Thanks Tracy.
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I like the way you set the stage for the closing line. Well done, Keith.
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I’m pleased it worked! Thanks so much, Russell.
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I wonder if he missed his chance again…
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Probably! Thanks Bjorn
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i wonder if she was his daughter. what were the chances?
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I’d like to think so although the odds are against it. Cheers Plaridel
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Very creative.
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Thanks so much.
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A wonderfully different take on the prompt! Kudos.
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My golden rule is always to dismiss my first thoughts when I see the picture on the basis that lots of others will have thought the same! Thanks so much Alicia
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Perfect … let the reader decide the end. Great take KR.
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Saves me the job! Cheers YS
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Totally engaged with this story from the first word. Although he may not be aware of it I feel he is carrying an image embedded in his head, same as my protagonist this week.
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That’s exactly what I had in mind when I wrote it. Thanks so much, Jilly.
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I wonder how much he had thought about his off-spring over the years. Poignant.
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It would be difficult not to I imagine. Thanks so much
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Very nice. it could be the beginning of an interesting tale. You should expand on it.
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Nice take! I wonder if Alison is waiting for the girl outside.
https://trailbrooklane.blogspot.com/2018/06/the-statue.html
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Now that’s a good idea! Cheers.
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Great story… I wonder if he ever talks to her
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That we’ll never know, but I’d like o think so. Thanks, Laurie.
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I hope he chased after her and caught up with his future!
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He would have done I’d had a few spare words! Now we’ll never know.
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Was she, wasn’t she? Such a tantalising titbit.
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I had in mind that she was, but who am I to know?!
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I felt she was too and wander what he’s going to do about it.
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Very intriguing! I wonder if they’ve lived close by all those years.
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Yet another thought that hadn’t occurred to me! Cheers
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He needs to run after her! What if he never gets another chance to learn if she is his daughter? Nicely told tale of heartbreak and potential redemption
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I imagine he would have done. Thanks so much Lynn
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My pleasure
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What a trip down memory lane! Saw the story unfolding in my mind’s eye.
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Thanks so much Margarisa
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Wow, you really brought that full circle!
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Looping the loop! Cheers Dawn.
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I really, really like this tale, Keith. I can just imagine so many things.
Pow ending to give us pause and our own thoughts on what might be.
Bravo ….!!!
Isadora 😎
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I’m so pleased you enjoyed it, thank you.
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